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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2005-02-11 08:57 AM



I saw the slow trail of
crumbs fall before  your
eyes with each swish of
sheer to here

I was aware of every "innocent"
stare in the barely there of
fruit tree offer that tripped
easily from her fingertips

did I not witness the hollow
grumble from the follow of your
eyes down violin curve of back
and while yet you were there

my own eyes caught unaware
the silent stare of another's
forbidden hunger

and the smell of pine...


~tier

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-02-11 09:08 AM



What poet hasn't known
a moment just like this?

You even made this one smell good
amongst the betrayal...

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-02-11 09:12 AM


written well, the reader feels this very deeply...
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2005-02-11 11:44 PM


Tiers~
at this absolutely beautiful piece~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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passing shadows
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4 posted 2005-02-12 01:02 AM


and what a smell it is
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5 posted 2005-02-17 12:17 PM


A wonderful write here, Tiersdin!
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6 posted 2005-02-17 09:30 AM


brilliant !!
hugs, Chris

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