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Don_Juan
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0 posted 2005-02-09 10:34 PM



Moonlit rhapsody
plays aomng silver
silk glowing shadows
these realities
flying about
fatigued eyelids
fade, giving way
to longing fantasies.
more than emotion
that cool breeze
playing across
springing tree buds
and there she stood
bathed in moonlight
smile glowing
her eyes like diamonds
shimmering, intoxicating
and that aura
drew me in
blinded by beauty
attracted in passion
we danced
palm to palm
hip to hip
in beat
with fluttering wings
of over head birds
(blue in nature
but full spectrum
while in flight.)
and whistling branches
laughter abounds
as this world
of pure imagination
deteriorates to
a bland city scape
bringing to an
end my own
valentines mystery
(leave,
tantalize me no longer.)

(I wrote this while listening to a song by the name of "dancin in the Moonlight." I hope this meets the criteria of the challenge and also hope that you all enjoy it.)

nice use of muffin

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-02-10 02:16 AM


good write
Earth Angel
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2 posted 2005-02-10 02:27 AM


Oh, yes indeedy! I thoroughly enjoyed it!!!
I was swept away by your romantic "Moonlit Rhapsody"!


EA

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3 posted 2005-02-10 05:01 AM


nicely done
Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2005-02-10 07:36 AM


This is beautiful and full of longing and will bring a smile to many faces.  Lovely write for the challenge, well done.
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5 posted 2005-02-10 08:17 AM


the music runs all through this...a delight to read....thank you...

~~*~~
the wind sings with the calm
tranquilize in the night
sien beauty on my lips
~~**~~

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