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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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5364 it was a ... witness of love a word you say is over - done-used and like your harem, always open (to interpretation) [i say] it was ... supposed to be there for you, as a shelter for storms but now the desert isn't so dry and it floods in my living room here, where you said it won't work i pulled out each stitch lost count after 5364 drifted off in thought as i rolled the past 4 months into balls of purple and black thinking i'd throw them away like you ... did with me but, after an hour i realized i was braiding the colors into a rope did you stick around for the hanging or has the weather already changed? ©sdt'05 ~~~~~~~ "so I wait for you like a lonely house till you will see me again and live in me. Till then my windows ache" ~neruda [This message has been edited by Snow (02-09-2005 09:31 AM).] |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
This is so sensitive snow, and very long for you, you may have to get another keyboard after the strain of this poem. LOL..but it is a fine poem..thank you.. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow, this is powerful. I like it alot, going in the library. "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Snow, this is beyond words that I have. It's just touched so much of me and G*d did you find the words I never could. Excellent. Sincerely, Sauni Sauni:) I shall allow no man to belittle my soul by making |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey Snow...love it! You knew I would though. Wow! This is so deep...and the title...blew me away! You have penned heartache with absolute perfection. Excuse me...have to go read this again. |
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Soulfisher Member
since 2005-01-07
Posts 226where ever the fly fishing is good |
but is 5364 the combination to a heart hidden and hurt secretly reaching out for someone to do more than acknowledge its pain. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
mm snowy...you take a part a tattoo dot by dot.. and it is a pleasure (shamefully) to admit I enjoy watching you |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Dear sweet snow, here is perfection...you! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah...that ending *sigh* |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
hmmmm |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bump! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
robert... i wonder if your response is because you don't think it's good ... (which i agree, it's not) it's simply emotion, but that doesn't mean i will let it lie as is. or, if you're wondering about the meaning.. either way, you know you can write me. thank you all for the thoughts on this. snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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