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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2005-02-08 12:10 PM




Art by Klimt

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"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache" ~neruda

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iliana
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1 posted 2005-02-08 12:26 PM


"the poetry we curve"  WOW YUMMY!
passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-02-08 02:29 AM


wonderful!
Soulfisher
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3 posted 2005-02-08 02:38 AM


from dodoitsu to tsa-yen you write in graceful style.
EvocativeVerse2
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4 posted 2005-02-08 01:26 PM


love it...hell yeah
Snow
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5 posted 2005-02-08 06:07 PM


for those that wrote to ask me "how do i ...."

i hope this helps.

I must admit that I just started writing Chueh-chu's 4 months ago. It is a delicate form and a bit testy. I shall try my best to describe the "What to's and what not to do's" when writing one.  

As far as I know there are two types of chueh-chu's. A 5-character and 7-character. A "Character" means one word. There is no syllable counting in this form. There are 4 lines with 5 charaters in each line (or 7 if writing a 7-character)
The first 2 lines must be full sentences and can not directly allude to each other. I'll refer back to my poem which hopefully helps define what I mean;

"Hazel language ... feathers through silence."

1st full sentence with 5 characters.

"Warmed by the conga's heart."

both sentences stand alone in what they are describing.

3rd and 4th lines can run together and they are meant to bring it all together or make the picture a bit more clear. The last line is for that jaw dropping ending. In this form, elipsis are important. and should only be used twice at the most and at least once, in the last line after the 3rd word.

"The Latin dance; tango molding,
weaving irridecent whispers ... falling snow."

I'm sure you have noticed the excess of puncuation. Oriental poetry of this form tries to create the mood through breaks and pauses. A suppleness or softness. A romance in words. Harsh words should be omitted from this form. The reader is meant to embrace this. To sigh while reading. That is the true test of writing these besides sticking to the form.

I hope this has helped. Thanks for being interested! That also means alot to me!

The header must signify that it's a STOP SHORT.

As in the case of mine it looked like this;

STOP SHORT #2: Hazel Language
*a-5-ch chinese chueh-chu

#2 - signifies my 2nd attempt or 2nd chueh-chu. The title is next then the description of the form. (*) This is my personal signature. You must find your own little touch to signify your writings.

RobertB
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6 posted 2005-02-08 09:54 PM


I think I like this too much.

Robert

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