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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-02-06 07:07 PM



As though frozen in time
this heart lie dormant
awaiting  the coming season
of change…

when life, in cycles
rearranges

     Time found us there
       amidst the fall

Hues of Autumn
did not dare compare
to the colors of you

   and I..

I dared not to look
beyond this day
for only time could see
what these few precious
moments would be.

I in daze, yet awake
still feel    this dream

how your brush
stroked my soul
in artistic touch

your pallet held shades
unknown to me

and even now
amber rays float down
leaving slight touch of warm
on pale of skin
too long touched
by winters kiss

In glance,
a gaze now turned upward
towards heaven

eyes wide open
             the blue of you
stares back at me.

The season’s splendor
has shown its grace
and I would linger
in                 this special place

knowing it would only
make more difficult
the journey back
to an ice queens lair

a palace void
from shed of tears

crystallized, frozen in time
         {echoes of when, heard in rhyme}
to only glisten
by sun kissed visions
               of  remember

  I met you there
            at the edge of September

when Autumn melted me
with the colors of
your fall.


my give a damn is busted....jodee


[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (02-07-2005 03:04 PM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2005-02-06 07:16 PM


"when Autumn melted me
with the colors of
your fall."

Beautiful, Donna...your new picture too!

passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-02-06 11:08 PM


just gorgeous! love the new pic!
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2005-02-07 07:50 AM


gs...enjoyed this poetic image...lovley

and so is the other one too


inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2005-02-07 08:36 AM


sometimes we just get stuck/hung up on one season for a spell; mine was last on a late spring morning
that keeps playing its colors inside me
nice to see you here in living color

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-02-07 08:59 AM


First I've gotta say before I forget, love the picture of the beautiful lady behind the words....smiles

I dared not to look
beyond this day
for only time could see
what these few precious
moments would be.

Very wise thoughts

Catrina
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6 posted 2005-02-07 09:03 AM



This holds
a special place
in September...

Robert Frazier
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7 posted 2005-02-07 10:59 AM


"Hues of Autumn
did not dare compare
to the colors of you"

your poetry speaks to you

Rf

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8 posted 2005-02-07 11:01 AM


The edge of Sept is beautiful from your eyes....

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

Enchantress
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9 posted 2005-02-07 01:34 PM


" I met you there
            at the edge of September

when Autumn melted me
with the colors of
your fall."

Beautiful Donna...very gentle and lovely.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

JL
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10 posted 2005-02-07 02:26 PM


Too nice for words.

JL


jellybeans
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11 posted 2005-02-07 02:46 PM


oh my if this is not the most beautifully 'painted' love poem....sigh
Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2005-02-08 08:46 AM


I do appreciate each of you, you are far to kind.  This one came to me and I tossed it aside, even tried to ignore it, but it seemed to want to keep coming back so I wrote it,
and changed it,
and rearranged it.

Thank you for reading what I ended up with.
Peace and hugs ya'll!

Sunshine
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13 posted 2005-02-08 08:54 AM


We just can't ignore the good stuff, little one...and our Muses won't let us!
Gentle Spirit
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14 posted 2005-02-08 08:57 AM


never quite thought of it that way
but perhaps that was exactly it,
maybe he just didnt want me to go
wordless??  

thanks momma sun....appreciate that.

saved_by_grace
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15 posted 2005-02-08 09:17 PM


Excellent read, GS!  Enjoyed every thought...


Hugs,

Becka

iliana
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16 posted 2005-02-08 09:23 PM


Awesome, Donna.  This is gorgeous!   ...jo
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