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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-02-03 11:13 PM



Soul weep music drifts
in gentle surround
violin strings    sing
a symphony of beauty

bleeds softly into tears
  and I ask
oh how
this blessed grace
has come to play for me
it's sweet and tender
rhapsody

plucking emotions
no longer heard
except through the silence
        and written words

held in pages of memory
pressed against   the gentle of me,

It is here I would hold you
  in slightest touch of keep
    as the melody of you
          brings my soul to weep.


The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (02-04-2005 07:35 AM).]

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DavePage
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1 posted 2005-02-03 11:26 PM


Beautiful - no other words for it.

Dave

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2005-02-03 11:30 PM


Dave is right - beautiful!
Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2005-02-03 11:31 PM


Dave and Helen, thank you both so very much. Hugs.  I appreciate your replies.
inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2005-02-03 11:38 PM


silence of written word

yes i hear the sounds written too along with many of us who can only find serenity in our words these trying times

lovely

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2005-02-03 11:42 PM


Mish, thank you. Sometimes the silence and our written words are our best friends.  Glad you enjoyed hon.
Catrina
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6 posted 2005-02-04 10:16 AM



An excellent response to Lauren's challenge!

LeeJ
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7 posted 2005-02-04 10:19 AM


plucking emotions
no longer heard
except through the silence
        and written words

held in pages of memory
pressed against   the gentle of me,


you've met this challenge more then well, this was beautiful...thank you

passing shadows
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8 posted 2005-02-04 10:25 AM


I personally don't do the challenge thing, but I love to see what others come up with

fantastic write!

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2005-02-04 11:40 AM


lovely images GS
sooth and smooth
and suggestions

Susan
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10 posted 2005-02-04 02:40 PM


your words move my heart - you are gifted in your pen touch -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

RSWells
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11 posted 2005-02-04 02:49 PM


Enjoyed the gentle song.


Put the photo with the hat back up.


Poets against the war is redundant

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2005-02-04 03:12 PM


Thank you everyone, your great
and RSWells, hows about this
You put one of you up smiling
and I will take this one down.  

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13 posted 2005-02-05 06:23 PM


how sweet the sound of this Donna, moving in everyway....I'm keeping this one as I have many others ....

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

the_loner_23
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14 posted 2005-02-05 06:26 PM


Very beautiful poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

ice
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15 posted 2005-02-06 07:30 AM


Smooth and compact, no extra words here, but the consolidation of thought does not take away from the messege, in fact it enhances it...

It allows the reader to feel the impulses,  the forwards and retracts, of the theme.

Well done, Donna.

enjoyed
___________ice/ford
   ><>

vandana
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16 posted 2005-02-06 10:45 AM


nice write
Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2005-02-06 05:06 PM


Thank you all so very much for the kind replies.  Hugs.
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