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LeeJ
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0 posted 2005-02-03 08:39 AM


Do You See
Vapor of spring rising?
Mountainsides white?
Melting into water cities
Since you’ve smiled
Southern winds turning face
Toward sounds low-flying
Grassy orchards, dancing day
Nests of heaven shining twilight inferno
Adorned with blending
Fireflies, pulse, stirring light
Young sweet thoughts stream
Like pussy willows swaying
Warm breeze epics passion
Appreciated, adorned
Your being
Ripples of charm freely offered
Kind eye herbs, gentle voices
Giggling foolish musicals
Blushing, stammering, teaching
Embracing fluted esteem
Echo sage siblings
Maple sugar light of day
Seeps deep to the spirit
Soul writers compassion
Looking to large trees of horizon
Fruit dripping
Moist green moss world
Gathering gold circles
I believe the storyteller in my core
Openhanded attachment to wonder
Wearing child bonnets
Collective conscious
Simply arsenal….
Diamond glinted spirit world
Milestones experimentation
Verse to grace omnipotent
Touches softly haïr
Touches warmly face
Tenders ruby lips, ardent fulmination
Hunger…
Breath…..please
Be composed of the longest prose
Alive…
You are the best part of the day


© Copyright 2005 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
1 posted 2005-02-03 08:44 AM


Lee

this is absolutely beautiful! .....the last line just sums it up so nicely...what a way to tell someone how special they are...

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2005-02-03 08:59 AM


I could read this to you
and make you smile
with my additions
between the lines


enjoyed your woman heart here Lee J

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

3 posted 2005-02-03 09:00 AM


yep, what L said.  The best part of any day is when someone special makes us smile.
Well met challenge hon.

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
4 posted 2005-02-03 11:16 AM


Way to go Lee J.  Great one girl!

JL


Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
5 posted 2005-02-03 08:36 PM


Enjoyed every line and flavor of this -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24
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OH
6 posted 2005-02-04 12:21 PM


"Openhanded attachment to wonder"--this spells Lee J.!

I'm intoxicated with your fantastic imagery!  A keeper for sure.  Happy soon to be Valentine's Day!  

           misc'e

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