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marcel
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since 2003-03-02
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az, usa

0 posted 2005-02-01 05:57 PM



The Blackbird Sings

Am I that caged blackbird,
That chirps for freedom?
Will these silky black wings,
Ever stretch forth in glorious flight?
Am I the pet of a cruel master,
Whose intentions are blind even to me?
Will I continue to see just a ray of hope,
When the warmth of the sun bids my heart to sing?
Truly this be a tragedy,
That has my soul shedding tears.

Should I feel the captive?
Homeless in a prosperous land,
Being fed with breadcrumbs
From the hands of strangers;
Or should I lie upon the ground in shame
As the sky rains ice and blame
Hoping for the warmth and shelter of prayers,
To wring the sorrow from these broken wings?

Do dreams lie?
A question I ponder,
As I sit perched upon the moon,
With eyes that shade of the crimson sunset;
Were I not to waken in the morn,
Would my blackness be cleansed by truth?
Or would I shriek loudly and mockingly,
Swooping down into the rising sun,
Disappearing into the light of nothingness....

Marcel

© Copyright 2005 keith marcel - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 2005-02-01 07:26 PM


Hello, I'm sometimes away from Passions for periods of time and somewhere in that passing I missed your entrance so this is the first I've read from you. I really enjoyed this piece, it's something I write often of. In fact, I'm posting one of my favorite works of poetry here for you. It was written by a man named Jonathan Steffen ...I think you'll enjoy

The Falcon To The Falconer

Unleash me from your hand
And I will lance the light for you
I'll cut a swordblade on the wind
And pennant it with flight for you
To signal I am yours
If you will free me to be true to you

Unleash me from your hand
And I will mock the sky for you
I'll pull the anger from the air
And make the breezes sigh for you
To show that I am yours
If you will free me to be true to you

Unleash me from your hand
And I will jewel it bright for you
I'll hunt the treasures of the wind
And pluck them into sight for you
To show that I am yours
If you will free me to be true to you

O, cast me from your hand
That I may show my love for you
And throw me to the wind
That I may know my need for you
All darkness on your hand
I'm hooded, pinned, and held by you
O, give me back my wings
That they may bring me back to you

~~Jonathan Steffen


I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

2 posted 2005-02-01 07:34 PM


We've had Blackbirds deign to use our garden for years.

They alternate between us and the neighbours.

I watched Blackie bring his daughter into my greenhouse while he pointed at the best bits.

Blackie is now very old, well beyond his prime living at the back of the compost bins, popping out at times.

Henny, his daughter chose to stay and little Hennies treat our garden as they want.

The thing I suppose I like most of all, is that I will sit down, mind my own business with a book, look up and find a bird 2 foot away looking at me.

Blackbirds have been a treat to us for years and we can try and bribe them but they go where they want, to who they want and where they want.

I liked your words but keeping Blackbirds in capitivity is wrong and the Blackbirds who visit us, are birds treating us as dining in different restaurants.

Dave

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
3 posted 2005-02-01 07:59 PM


love the mood in this - the thoughts and questions

love this image:

As I sit perched upon the moon,
With eyes that shade of the crimson sunset;


well done -  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
4 posted 2005-02-01 09:18 PM


Excellent write.
TD

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
5 posted 2005-02-01 10:44 PM


Your writing is always so diversified.  The perspective in this one through the eyes of the Blackbird is very captivating and provocative.  This will hold a shelf in my library.  Bravo. .....jo
ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
6 posted 2005-02-01 10:59 PM


blackbirds, ravens, crows and such...much reminded by how they have become metaphors in time...enjoyed the perspective


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2005-02-02 12:50 PM


you did good on this one
A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
8 posted 2005-02-02 06:05 AM


Great poetry here!

Love and hugs~ARH

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!


Midnitesun
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Gaia
9 posted 2005-02-02 09:50 AM


loved this, am keeping it to re-read again
choshi
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since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184
New York
10 posted 2005-02-02 10:09 AM


beautiful writing....thank you for this powerful imagery...~P
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