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Susan
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2005-01-31 11:35 PM



i walk the walk
of tip-toe balance
ten gallon hat
of heart
upon my head

careful

don’t trip

to do so would spill
my heart bled red

to puddle

to pool

only to be washed away
gutter spilled dread

s.a.t.

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

© Copyright 2005 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
1 posted 2005-01-31 11:38 PM




oh hell woman i am so all over this!

~~~~~~~
"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache" ~neruda

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2005-02-01 07:29 AM


yep and then we say
do I think to much
enjoyed this suzz

littlewing
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3 posted 2005-02-01 07:33 AM


ha! agreeing with Dark there,
Susan, this is just raw.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2005-02-01 09:20 AM


Yes, yes, yes...to every line, Susan

hugs
M


Susan
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5 posted 2005-02-01 10:57 AM


thank you friends - and yes, sometimes we think too much -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

LeeJ
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6 posted 2005-02-01 12:58 PM


deep thoughts from the intellect

Tremendous

LeeJ
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7 posted 2005-02-01 12:58 PM


deep thoughts from the intellect

Tremendous

passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2005-02-01 01:00 PM


awesome piece!
Susan
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walking the surreal
9 posted 2005-02-01 01:03 PM


thank you most kindly my friends -

Hugs - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

marcel
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az, usa
10 posted 2005-02-01 05:09 PM


wow! I have always been impressed with those gifted to say so much in such few words, especially a piece that screams of emotion and power as this!
hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 2005-02-01 07:27 PM


short and powerful...not a wasted word among the bunch
Susan
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walking the surreal
12 posted 2005-02-01 07:48 PM


Marcel - Hoot-owl - funny, this was written with a great deal of feeling, and yet, I didn't think it would come across well, it is a pleasant surprise to see that it has done so -

thank you so much for your kind replies

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
13 posted 2005-02-01 08:04 PM



Waited all day to find the right moment to read this...

looks like I would have had to stand in line to reply...

Susan
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walking the surreal
14 posted 2005-02-01 08:15 PM


thank you dear sunshine - for the hug-

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

EvocativeVerse2
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15 posted 2005-02-02 02:58 AM


Love this! LOL! Absolutely!
Susan
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walking the surreal
16 posted 2005-02-02 10:27 AM


Thanks Kevin -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2005-02-02 07:37 PM


YES...yes! Yes...

I damned near missed this....
so glad I didn't.  Wow lady.  

JL
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18 posted 2005-02-02 07:39 PM


I agree with all the above!

JL

Susan
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walking the surreal
19 posted 2005-02-02 08:34 PM


Thank you Donna - for enjoying my spill of heart -

Thank you JL for your most agreeable reply

Hugs - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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