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ice
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0 posted 2005-02-05 09:07 PM


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Fond this feeling, not strong enough this
Statement-- I must raise dimension of words.

Being fletched through the chest
With a Cherub shaft,  (bless the cripple)
Has fallen me to the small Gods focus,
Cupids arrow tipped with Eros poison
Blurs speech, and I cannot think to speak
For the Chaos of your beauty numbs my lips,
And but slurred words come to voice my feelings.

Such a vice is this, this amity, your eyes
Beam the  light of amours stare, Their
Heat melting away my shyness,  making me
Desire the female of you; my vision shows
Only  red, fire in blood blinds my moral self;
Thus absorbed, I cannot move but towards.

Come my adorable, sup on this admiration,
If there be need for such nourishment in you.
Let us not chastise Saint Valentine,
Who urged union of lovers, under duress.
Come close, and let yourself  be mine....


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Margherita
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1 posted 2005-02-05 09:10 PM


Exactly so!

Passionate write, so very well done!

Love, Margherita

Midnitesun
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2 posted 2005-02-05 09:43 PM


Now, how come, whenever I have been 'hit upon' in a lounge, I've not heard such original lines?

"Cupids arrow tipped with Eros poison
Blurs speech, and I cannot think to speak
For the Chaos of your beauty numbs my lips,
And but slurred words come to voice my feelings"


LOL, usually it's "Don't I know you from somewhere?"
Answer =NO
or, "Would you like some company?"
again, usually NO

Now if someone were to spout poetry? Hmmmm.....

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2005-02-05 09:49 PM


LOL, by name, the top four posts look like a poetic weather report. LOL

Soulfisher
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4 posted 2005-02-05 09:56 PM


YOU HIT THE NAIL ON THE HEAD WITH THIS ONE ICE. I THINK I WILL MAIL THIS ONE TO A CERTAIN SOMEONE AND SEE IF SHE WOULD LIKE TO GO OUT SOME TIME. THEN AGAIN I COULD MAIL IT ANONOMOUS AND WAIT TILL THE 15TH TO ASK HER.LOL
Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2005-02-05 10:06 PM


Brava sir,
Brava!!

Martie
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6 posted 2005-02-05 11:23 PM


Ford

You have a good line...because it sounds like the truth.  I enjoyed this...Chaos indeed!!  

Susan
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7 posted 2005-02-06 12:03 PM


Nicely done - love and chaos - yep- seems about right

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

passing shadows
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8 posted 2005-02-06 11:04 PM



LeeJ
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9 posted 2005-02-07 10:25 AM


well, I'll tell ya what
If someone placed a poem like this in front of my eyes, I'd follow him anywhere....hehehehhe

Ford, this was awesome!

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10 posted 2005-02-07 10:58 AM


A beautiful chaos of beauty.....
bravo Sir wonderfully met!

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

froggy
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11 posted 2005-02-08 08:43 PM


Still just as sweet as it was the first time I read it.

:-)

Within this heart you'll find love

Krawdad
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12 posted 2005-02-13 09:53 PM


but for the want of such eyes . . .
Enjoyed!

TexUS
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13 posted 2005-02-14 12:41 PM


Oh yes...this was completely wonderful!  

iliana
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14 posted 2005-02-14 01:24 PM


Ford, oh, yes....I think you capture the beauty and the chaos well in this one.  Bravo!  Wishing you a happy "Chaos" Day!  lol   ....jo
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