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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2005-01-29 07:28 AM



Broken Roads

behind the wheels
dust
clouding the view
of what was
a dried path
gone over
so many times

it is the path I go

for there is not one rock
that I do not know
or leaf that was not turned
where I lost
a gravelly kiss
but I do believe
paper still
covers stone

just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart



© Copyright 2005 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-01-29 07:35 AM


and it took me so long to understand the metaphor of the game too...

you have a way lady, of making the message float like featherpaper, cutting through the thicket, to slam home like stone.

smile...you play all three.

You win.

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2005-01-29 07:38 AM


And scissors cut paper
Allowing the stone to fall out,
If permitted.
I wish you only smooth pathways to travel

Gloom

pandonov
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3 posted 2005-01-29 09:41 AM


hope you are right
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4 posted 2005-01-29 10:11 AM


amazing write.

~Alli~

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5 posted 2005-01-29 10:11 AM


This paper most certainly does.....

I like it when you write in this mood...it takes me right along with you.

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6 posted 2005-01-29 11:42 AM


sometimes we know the road too well

I've missed you

RSWells
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7 posted 2005-01-29 11:54 AM


Head for a macadam and what ever you do act as though your ride has no reverse.

Poets against the war is redundant

DavePage
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8 posted 2005-01-29 02:46 PM


Very subtle.

A child's game creeps in near the end.

Yes I really liked this.

The image, the thought, the imagination, the play.

Superb.

Dave

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