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LeeJ
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0 posted 2005-01-28 01:15 PM


Mature apple month
Real pleasure in a carriage
Glistening white
Hidden away
Where hot houses color
Early morning in decorative petals
Watering cans swarm
From heavens shadows
Curling around every earthly thing
Luster frolics & hums softly
Firm broad shouldered expression
Stroking grey whiskers

Having coffee with this quiver
This vigorous balcony
Leaves a place in my soul
Of violins
Attentively listening
Mere morsals of what is to be
What I will be...then
A mirage in the distance
With no laws of optics
Simply an atmospheric dimenstion

I am that little path
I am Africa
Steep bank on a dark surface
Wide fields
Frightened child
Evening breeze touching you softly
Horizon with rose in the sky
Bare footed time
Clay bank and vanished smoke
Intense desire
Radiantly inspired
A black garment of hope
Embarrassed blush
Nonsensical hush

Tired trembling hands
Deep sighs, belly laughs
A laborer in large gardens
That married light
A good heart stained and shy
Trenching the soil, impersonal
Ignorance and wide eyed
Bad tempered and silly
Absurdly friendly
Face of thought, you occupy
Nervous exhaustion

Sometimes...the thorn in your side
Your hallucination
I am struggle and sin
Common and exquisite
Wearing a different dress when we dance
You have become as I,
Necessities of our existence
Insignificant to most
Yet extraordinary to our persistence

Polite love looking through a window
Joy smothers my being…
With fuller face
Good natured independence
Has surely, been good to me

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (01-28-2005 02:51 PM).]

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RSWells
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1 posted 2005-01-28 02:33 PM


Interesting stream of thought. I imagine most of we pip-ers can find at least a few lines to reflect on with a nodding head. Enjoyed

Poets against the war is redundant

MGROVES
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2 posted 2005-01-28 06:42 PM


enjoyed~


DavePage
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3 posted 2005-01-28 07:34 PM


Lee

I was reading this and the thought that kept coming back to me was "and then came aids".

What apples do you bite when no-one is alive to pick them.

I'd need to read your words a lot of times to fully understand them.

It seemed as if every topic spawned another set of topics.

regards

Dave

Susan
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4 posted 2005-01-28 07:55 PM


in the beginning, i felt inspired to head my butt down to the park and hit the conservatory - the spring blooms will all be out about now - nothing like glory in color in February - (yes, i know it's still January, but close counts)

as i read on, i thought of lovers in elementary simplicity - feeling and discovering each other without pretense -
the african part - to me, is letting go of all our civilized affectations and finding our primal emotions - ah, but that's just me

the fun thing about your work is its complexity in that it allows so many different interpretations - and yet, still, one gets a sense of your essence through the words as well -

Hugs -   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2005-01-29 09:00 AM


Sometimes...the thorn in your side
Your hallucination
I am struggle and sin
Common and exquisite
Wearing a different dress when we dance
You have become as I,
Necessities of our existence
Insignificant to most
Yet extraordinary to our persistence

Polite love looking through a window
Joy smothers my being…
With fuller face
Good natured independence
Has surely, been good to me

The entire of this was wonderful to read...and my favorite lines describe the beauty of and ageless child...the one that smiles in you.
TD

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6 posted 2005-01-29 10:25 AM


Nice write! Enjoyed~

~Alli~

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