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Open Poetry #34

the thoughts of you

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

0 posted 2005-01-27 06:23 PM

I'd sleep underneath the warmth in the blanket of night
as the moon always tendered the broken pieces of my heart
no dream or fantasies would i grant to numb the agony
just thoughts of you and i even those of pain.

Yet you'd picture us roaming snow covered fields
where you'd throw away the basket of rose petals
falling with the flakes was that love in the air
taken the chance i told you how i felt right there.

Were it too late to think such thoughts of you
or yet is there time to turn them to life
where i'd need not have no-more restless nights
fearing the question would you love me too.

"mumbles some like the first draft"

i'd sleep at night not dream nor lie
thoughts so clear of you and i
you'd picture us in a snow covered field
rose in hand i'd say my vows and mean them too
were it too late to think such thoughts of you
or yet is there time to turn them to life
where i'd need not have no-more restless nights
fearing the question would you love me too

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2005-01-27 07:11 PM

i'd sleep at night not dream nor lie
thoughts so clear of you and i
"you'd picture us in a snow covered field
rose in hand i'd say my vows and mean them too
were it too late to think such thoughts of you
or yet is there time to turn them to life
where i'd need not have no-more restless nights
fearing the question would you love me too"
That close is absolutely perfect.
Great write RedStoneEB.

JL