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rm711 Member
since 2002-11-30
Posts 131Wiltshire, England 
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I can already see how this all ends smokescreen empty train stations and car parks full of parked cars I remember the way we always hated the green lollipops so we threw them over the fence in the back garden and I thought the world was going to collapse it was such an exciting ending to know that it was wrong at the end of everything. you'll question in time find a place where you can see only the sea and the sky watch the sunrise and know that all you have left is to die because you were born already. and apparently that's all that's real but no one needs to know that because it isn't the truth the truth isn't that shallow at the end of everything. you'll question in time I will never breathe the same air as you I'll promise you though to love you my whole life and never leave the room you're in and be your shadow to haunt your every breath and never be that strong like the hard ground that took the wind from me that summer when I fell and you weren't there to notice at the end of everything. you'll question in time when it's summer all you ever ask for is rain you hate winter because you say it's too cold at night I keep up with you only to drag behind I focus my attention but I'm slowly going blind you remembered when you painted all the walls yellow because it was my least favourite colour and I never understood why you bored me to death I grazed my knee at the end of everything. You'll question in time I know how I feel but I know that it's a good thing temporary traffic lights and fog in the morning today smells like the inside of your car pick a better time to have problems and keep buying things that you'll never need smokescreen climb off the platform. You'll question in time |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
Rosie, I find this to be a very interesting read. Well done! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A write of timeworn etchings, deeper than one would expect from such a cherubic countenance. I'll be looking for more from you. Enjoyed Poets against the war is redundant |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I know how I feel but I know that it's a good thing that inner voice which is never wrong I can't express to you what an excellent write this was...I to, will be looking forward to reading more of you |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
the images this creates! wow |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good read, thank you |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Awesome images in this, and full of different emotions we can all relate to. You made us understand... Well done. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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