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A Day in the Life, Bewildered
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A Day in the Life, Bewildered |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ It's came down to this, the facts to face a day in the life, years later. I have become a liability to the people I loved most turning into my worst enemy. For better or for worse, in sickness and health, for richer or for poorer, and the fact that alimony is over rated, in spite of things. I've heard it said that pain dies a slow death, but a heart ache passes quickly if we're lucky. Losing all that I held dear the cause and effect of salt in my wounds devastated, that I can't hear you anymore. Pleading like a desperate woman, admitting it took two in order to make it right and right our wrongs. I loved you and despised you, that won't ever change, so blame me if you will. And if you think of me at all picture me bewildered for the lives we rearranged and how corrupt it feels to sever the ties in a heart beat. Sadly we were never a united front like the song Linda sang, we would travel forever to the beat of a different drum while someone else makes eyes at me. But they are not yours, and that's all that I see. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (01-26-2005 02:50 AM).] |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
this ought to pierce more than a few bewildere hearts.i hear that acceptance don't come easy and some of us just seem to be slow learners and fast forgetters...you done a fine job of living up to your pen name with this one. Live like it's your last day... |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Time is of an essence ... ... a rose by any other name. Time to rise Bluesy one.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It's came down to this, the facts to face a day in the life, years later. I have become a liability to the people I loved most turning into my worst enemy. For better or for worse, in sickness and health, for richer or for poorer, and the fact that alimony is over rated, in spite of things. I hear you, Lori and I feel you~~  and loveM |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Sad Lori...but still well written..thank you.. Goldenrose. Last night i dreamed i ate a ten pound marsh mallow, when i woke up the pillow was gone (Tommy Cooper). |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Lori, I love the way this flowed- from one tortured heart to another. ~tier |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
The vulnerability of our heart is nothing we can see ahead. You privilege us with such a beautiful sadness. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Blues, Cnfessions of humanity. Profanity insanity and all that stuff. You write well but live better. Enjoyed |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bluesy, your words carry sadness across the miles but sometimes we need to feel the depths before we can fully appreciate the highs and be worthy of them. It's a long slow and painful journey on this road of life we are forced to travel yet somehow we survive the bumps and potholes along the way. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to all of you good poets for taking the time. My apologies for going off the deep end here. Now where did I leave my straight jacket! ugh! Deep blue sigh~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Well written - excellent ending - touching my empathy strings here -  susanbtw - I borrowed your straight jacket, but am still a bit bent, may I use it a bit longer?  If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Goodness, Bluesy How we all relate to this: I loved you and despised you, that won't ever change, so blame me if you will. I have missed you. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
damn Lori, this aches and is so full of honesty which is one of the traits I love in your poetry....You are true to you and you are one beautiful bluesy gal! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is indeed a blue's serenade... and well done... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori "And if you think of me at all picture me bewildered for the lives we rearranged and how corrupt it feels to sever the ties in a heart beat." Knowing and understanding this. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, Always you face the music. How I respect your candor and love your spirit. But mostly I miss the visits. I pray for you... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, Lori, you did convey a feel of bewilderment in this poem. I feel like I just peeked in your diary. So much said here. ......jo |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I find much in this , one one for the Library for sure! Great work! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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