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0 posted 2005-01-24 10:47 PM


On A Ledge

Perched on today
like a baby
on a window ledge.
It’s a fall either way
and I don’t know
how I got here.
Time is a lot of
places, none of
them very good,
and what’s in
the room with us
doesn’t care about
floor plans or
fire escapes.
So what will it be,
the carpet and it, or
hope for an awning
five floors down?
Time and gravity
will do the choosing.
After all, I’m a baby.
I don’t know what
awnings are.
Or floors, baby.
Or hope.
But I do know down.

© Copyright 2005 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-01-24 11:56 PM


Man do I know this feeling (seems a different sort of write for you). Enjoyed

Poets against the war is redundant

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2 posted 2005-01-25 12:52 PM


Oh, I do touch on things like this from time to time, but it's less noticible with me because I don't get pompous about it like some folks do.

With something like this, it's all to easy to put on airs. Actually it's very simple stuff but for some odd reason we can't resist surrounding it with mumbo-jumbo...either physics mumbo-jumbo or occult mumbo-jumbo...neither is necessary. Tune in to what's inside you, and you're there.

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3 posted 2005-01-25 03:57 AM


I think we all know down...good stuff ed - enjoyed
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4 posted 2005-01-25 04:44 AM


oh yes we've all been there done that


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5 posted 2005-01-25 05:36 AM


you know I love this
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6 posted 2005-01-25 07:27 AM


been on that ledge...and I am sure will be on it again~~

Always an interesting read

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7 posted 2005-01-25 07:31 AM


Down, down down ....something bout that word I hate, but I love your poem

Mxx


and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

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8 posted 2005-01-25 08:20 AM


stay up
please
somebody needs you

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9 posted 2005-01-25 08:39 AM


loving your mind muscles and how they articulate emotions...tremendous
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10 posted 2005-01-25 11:48 AM


oh hell, I made a home on that ledge...lol

I felt it.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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11 posted 2005-01-25 03:00 PM


Oh, wow... you know down... and you know poetry!!! This is fantastic, my friend!

You stripped the mumbo-jumbo all right... and left us with raw excellence.

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12 posted 2005-01-25 07:01 PM


WoW.

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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13 posted 2005-01-26 10:01 AM


Distilled.

My mind was playing blonde and I couldn't think of that term when I responded... but it fits. *S*

Or hope.
But I do know down.

Yes....

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14 posted 2005-01-26 03:57 PM


but I do know down

I hope you know just what a gem 'knowing down' is....the poem and the bit of knowledge both.........WOW!

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15 posted 2005-01-26 04:01 PM


Ed

Up to a certain age, babies have no fear of falling and they don't perceive the danger. I think I'll reach out my hand and lead you towards the carpeted side...if that's ok.  

This poem has impact for many who have felt this way.  Well done!  

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16 posted 2005-01-26 11:11 PM


very touching Ed.....

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My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
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17 posted 2005-01-26 11:24 PM


to close to home right now for me to say anything more than, understood.and thanks, for writing what my pen won't
take care

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