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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-01-22 07:55 AM



Here in Winter’s brittle night,
my always troubled sleep
built from fits of memories
of running in the canyons,
hiding
from determined predators,
crawling in the canebrakes
seeking fragile shelters
soon to be gone,
where to this distant day
I still at times awake
screaming
riddled by sharp winds
of a stark reality,
has left me shaking in the cold,
as in truth
I am waiting on a storm.

This early sky
was briefly amber,
pink and blue,
fleeting colors
gone now
to a brooding cold and graying dawn;
does your morning caress you,
hold you in a kind embrace
wrapped satisfied
gently with erotic dreams,
patiently
conjuring a softly stifled yawn?  

I pray the tropic’s breeze,
calm blue water’s hope,
gives you the weather gage
this day
and keeps you warm.

©2005 by icebox

[This message has been edited by icebox (01-23-2005 09:22 PM).]

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EvocativeVerse2
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1 posted 2005-01-22 08:02 AM


I hope the tropic’s breeze,
calm blue water’s hope,
gives you the weather gauge
this day
and keeps you warm.

Love this part icebox. Very well done! Bravo my friend!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2005-01-22 08:31 AM


actually, you've encouraged me to go cook the full monty breakfast.

and I owe you stories, love.

oh do I owe you....hard-bear hugs

thank you

a gentle man you are

passing shadows
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3 posted 2005-01-22 09:35 AM


I'm waiting on a storm too

we'll wait together

DavePage
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4 posted 2005-01-22 03:38 PM


I always like your candid thoughts and in depth analyses.

Dave

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5 posted 2005-01-22 11:36 PM


Woo, thanks for the warning -- I'll definitely stay outta the sack with you!

.....now what'll I do with my weekend......

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6 posted 2005-01-22 11:43 PM


ROTFLMAO at Serenety's reply
so much so, I lost my own words in the giggle!
a good write, in other words, generating cool replies

flute players united...

Aenimal
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7 posted 2005-01-23 12:31 PM


well done sir
MGROVES
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8 posted 2005-01-23 12:43 PM


enjoyed


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9 posted 2005-01-23 04:08 PM


Enjoyed this very much!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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10 posted 2005-01-23 04:29 PM


i have a tendency to over think what i read, often missing what the author intended, but, finding something else does not mean the writer failed. no, i think that when someone comes away with a different view than the others see, i think, it shows what a great poem i've read.

for me, this piece is sad...the pain i can feel is almost wrenching ... and reminds me of someone i know who suffers from PTSD. a lot like what he writes of, actually.

excellent work!
(sorry for the ramble)

snow

"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache"
p.neruda

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11 posted 2005-01-23 04:31 PM


enjoyed
Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2005-01-23 07:53 PM


I never seem to know when a storm is coming, they always take me by surprise.

*kiss* for your waking.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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13 posted 2005-01-23 09:50 PM


I snore....so that is out...

Enjoyed this, so true of the warrior's
sleep, sometimes fitful...with dreams that
haunt the waking memories...

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