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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2005-01-21 11:04 AM



Stark,
there on my bed.
An envelope baring your name
for return
should it not make its destination.

It had found its way.
Bringing with it
a rush of memories
and a too soon goodbye.

A mix of yes I remember,
please leave me be,
maybe another time
and never again.

It was the CD you knew I wanted
you remembered
yet I was disappointed.

No, “baby I miss you,
I made a mistake,
I’m coming for you.”

Just the Cranberries greatest hits
singing of missing, loving and

lingering.  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

© Copyright 2005 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-01-21 11:08 AM


No, “baby I miss you,
I made a mistake,
I’m coming for you.”


I feel this one Susan.  sigh...

let the tunes melt it away gal...

inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2005-01-21 11:15 AM


love that little girls big voice on the cranberries
achy breaky heart it is
as your melancholy sings so sweetly here

LeeJ
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3 posted 2005-01-21 11:17 AM


Susan, this was tender and sweet
Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2005-01-21 11:35 AM


damn....

will trade you a willie nelson live
for that one?  enjoyed this soul of you susan

RSWells
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5 posted 2005-01-21 12:01 PM


The music lingers beyond the singers. No end to it is there? Enjoyed

Poets against the war is redundant

icebox
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in the shadows
6 posted 2005-01-21 12:02 PM


So very clear...
vandana
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7 posted 2005-01-21 12:04 PM


good read
Lighthousebob
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8 posted 2005-01-21 12:54 PM


True to life. I felt by reading your poem that I was able to share just a little tiny bit of your life... Your Honesty here is very very special and I do hope that you get what you truly wanted.... (hmmmm) the Limited Edition with the Bonus CD. (Smiles) Good job. -Bob
Aenimal
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9 posted 2005-01-21 04:07 PM


this one cut deep, as i recently found some old letters..

hugs
in lighter news, injuries have healed, games may commence grins.

*Alli4000*
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10 posted 2005-01-21 06:10 PM


Wow.

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2005-01-21 11:42 PM


I wouldn't mind getting kissed until it hurt...James
ThisDiamond
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12 posted 2005-01-22 12:06 PM


If it hurts, they say, you aren't doing it right (LOL)!

Smile woman...
You have much to be so proud of here.
TD

Susan
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13 posted 2005-01-22 12:48 PM


Laughing at TD - hehe

But this poem - sad, yet beautifully expressed -

hugs   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

iliana
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14 posted 2005-01-22 12:51 PM


Susan, you have a way of really getting the point across in all you write.  I liked the way you ended this one.   .....jo
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with you
15 posted 2005-01-22 12:53 PM


"It had found its way.
Bringing with it
a rush of memories
and a too soon goodbye."


you made the tears well up with this...


Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2005-01-25 12:18 PM


Thank you everyone.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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