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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2005-01-16 07:31 PM



The last of his wine, now, a tacky stain
An old god sits alone at the bar

Regarding the room behind him
In the mirror behind the bottles

Sees there, his own image as well

Long, gray, unkempt, his hair
Frames eyes that look, even to him

Tired

His granaries, long ago, emptied
His temples now lie in Kiddy-block ruin

He knows its time to give the world over
To all the young pagans, vapid and vain

The debauching of sylphs and their songs
sung trembling and high into the night

He’ll need leave to the godlings

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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2005-01-16 07:45 PM


"He knows its time to give the world over
To all the young pagans, vapid and vain"

I think it's a never ending cycle...


"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

coyote
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2 posted 2005-01-16 08:30 PM


A fine write, Wranx.

I couldn't help but think of the Beats.

coyote 8)

"If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it."
Albert Einstein

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
3 posted 2005-01-16 08:57 PM


excellent
icebox
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in the shadows
4 posted 2005-01-16 10:15 PM


You have a gift that is astonishing.
Dark Angel
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5 posted 2005-01-16 10:20 PM


Marvelous Bro, you're a wonder m'friend.



Mxx

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2005-01-16 10:22 PM


Buy an old goddess a drink?





What icebox said.

Sunshine
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7 posted 2005-01-16 10:22 PM


the gods that are winking
in that mirror?

they tease...

a few of you...and you know...

still have many many miles...

albeit the ambered glass...

Ratleader
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8 posted 2005-01-17 09:40 AM


Beautifully done...your eyes see deep and your voice rings clean...there's a bit of a god in you, sir.

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Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2005-01-17 09:53 AM


I thought there was another oldster in the bar..but couldn't see that far and was too damn tired to walk down there..

way kewl stuff guy...
but the godlings shiver when they see us
and know we are them later
after closeing time


Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2005-01-17 08:31 PM


and then, there are some of us....
who still love to catch the glance of an 'old' god  

Susan
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walking the surreal
11 posted 2005-01-17 09:08 PM


Oh yeah, what Kacy said

Fantastic, this -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

passing shadows
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displaced
12 posted 2005-01-17 09:57 PM



James_A_Fraser
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13 posted 2005-01-18 12:59 PM


Old or not, god this is good!

You may be touched, but you have a touch....



~~J

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14 posted 2005-01-18 02:09 AM


through all the wine he failed to see
that he who thought as  god
can change whats about to be


excuse me that just came out   this was nice  and one that makes one think



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