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Suede
Junior Member

since 2003-08-25

Posts 38
Drifting on the soul

0 posted 2005-01-16 09:45 AM

Yellow bird which flew with the sunlight
From the nest at dawn to my heart at dusk
I heard her stories beneath the leaves
Uttered the thoughts of a lonely soul
Misplaced smiles and unlived memories
Holding a tear dearly, close in the palm
Abandoned seeds and unwatered dreams
A story lies in the tone of her pain
My journey begins in the beat of her breast
With a yellow bird in my hand at sunset
I flew high to kiss the clouds
And I kept what he lost

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2005-01-16 09:59 AM

Wonderful write, touched my heart deeply!

Love, Margherita

Suede
Junior Member

since 2003-08-25

Posts 38
Drifting on the soul

2 posted 2005-01-16 10:04 AM

Thank you, Margherita. Appreciate your thoughts

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2005-01-16 10:26 AM

Suede
Good write, enjoyed the read.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2005-01-16 11:27 AM

A story lies in the tone of her pain

~*~

You've been gone too long.
Welcome home!

Suede
Junior Member

since 2003-08-25

Posts 38
Drifting on the soul

5 posted 2005-01-16 11:28 AM

Thanks Seymour and Sunshine...I feel at home with the fellow poets and amazing souls at Piptalk. Thanks - Suede

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2005-01-16 12:30 PM

Wonderful lines here...each precise and uplifting.
TD

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2005-01-16 04:42 PM

Every feather has a tiny story to tell....every bird is a trove of stories.

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*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2005-01-16 06:31 PM

Great write!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

9 posted 2005-01-17 04:51 PM

This is one of the best I have read in a good while.

Keep writing.

Dave

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

10 posted 2005-01-17 05:56 PM

wow.

some of the best poems are none more than a few powerful sentences.. and you've proven this to be so

marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

11 posted 2005-01-17 06:42 PM

very powerful write! I have found one of those yellow birds myself.............

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