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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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 Carry me across the road wet with runoff drizzled over curb and side walked under the door of home and more can we swim in air breathing water bubbles stream the swift of current like a scream? the bridge is gone from across so filled the sound on walls that slip saved within community the new grass waves before it falls and makes of ground a roof that’s proof the rock waits like an angry sore a small stream leaking out tossing the color black about do I dare to jump from it across the fury of this tongue of grit into a question of heaven to see if within the brave of the necessary us is belief ------- photo by Adrienne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Your symbols play the playground of the mind.  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poetry Martie - with all the rain your part of the US is getting it certainly seems symbols of wet and struggle would come to mind - you write it so much better than I can say it - Paul |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"can we swim in air breathing water bubbles stream the swift of current like a scream? the bridge is gone from across so filled the sound on walls that slip saved within community the new grass waves before it falls and makes of ground a roof" I have great admiration for people who can do with skill things I can not even reach. I can not reach this place of writing that you achieve with such grace, economy and style. How this brought me back to the unsettled forests of my childhood, I do not know, but I have been sitting here remembering the brazen trees of autumn, game trails, tumbled glacial boulder fortresses of children's fantasies, lush blueberries, raspberries and blackberries in the tangles of summer's tall grass, worried deer herds of winter's icy streams...and always, the rains and surge of newly wakened life in spring. Thank you for this light that reached through time for me...and made me smile. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I have great admiration for people who can do with skill things I can not even reach. I can not reach this place of writing that you achieve with such grace, economy and style. I think Icebox said it perfectly...You do have that talent, so well expressed and given to us that we might savor it and fall into our own place of dreams. [This message has been edited by Magnus (01-15-2005 02:12 PM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I too must quote icebox here - "I have great admiration for people who can do with skill things I can not even reach. I can not reach this place of writing that you achieve with such grace, economy and style." Beautiful writing from a beautiful lady! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
As you know I must follow Ford's thinking, there are so few that just take words to the pinnacle and I am thinking you may be teaching them. Beautiful m'friend, just beautiful! Carpe' Diem |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I must talk to Kit about a nodding smilie...  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie? Your words ROCK! Incredible you.  Mxx p.s doin the library thang. all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~ |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I'm glad you decided to post this in spite of the dark in it...see, the comments here bear me out, no one here minds a little darkness if you're looking into it with love and telling the real of it. It's even better now...I'm honored that you would show me your work at all, let alone things that are still forming...a lot of trust in that, and I hope I always merit it. And these lines... that’s proof the rock waits like an angry sore a small stream leaking out tossing the color black about do I dare to jump from it across the fury of this tongue of grit into a question of heaven to see if within the brave of the necessary us is belief You really know how to bring a punch up from the canvas! Such raw power in these words that it's hard to imagine poetry having any stronger impact...yet gentle at the same time, still Martie in spite of the lightning flashes in the words. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This is so beautiful!  ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
enjoyed! great write hugs, g "Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie, I have to agree with James: "Such raw power in these words that it's hard to imagine poetry having any stronger impact...yet gentle at the same time." This describes so well how I see much of your writing; always very powerful.  ....jo |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
A keeper - as all of your works are. Ps. letter on it's way... Much love sis, lucky dale Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Made me think of the recent mud slides that came from nowhere, so unexpectly. How precious life is, for in an instant change comes. How well we have come to know change. Hugs, TD |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Beautiful as always, Martie... Love you, my friend... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Be careful dear lady....your depth is showing.....and it's quite a view! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Magnificent expression, Martie! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice words |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieLoveSis~ Knowing you ... reading this ... I can only say, "Jump, my friend." Oh yes ... "Jump."  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
I agree with Marge. Well done. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Those who carry us, is affirmation enough to believe in. I think of you often, and enjoyed your poem very much, Martie. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such a treat to read your thoughts turned into words. This is a well-crafted poem. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I'm happy to have read you today before leaving...thank goodness...you never cease to amaze me Martie...with exception writing like one of the Masters...thank you for this and for your brilliant mind.... Hugs to you Lee J. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Martie, I can't express how your poetry affects me. You write depth so smoothly. cathy |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beauty and grace, or simply Martie |
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