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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2005-01-15 08:50 AM



You were teaching future minstrel sons
Dedicated beyond compare
When the music from an ancient time
Seemed to take your heart somewhere
Above the smog and darkness
Above the eagles on high
To a place beyond the tragic
To eclpise your soul and mind

Chorus:
And you thought, "why am I speaking?"
"There's no one to understand"
"My thoughts could fill a canyon"
"But they're lost within my hands."

So you thought about your license
Your poetic just embrace
And you realized you knew enough
To turn knowledge into hate
And no one sought integrity
They stayed lost in thier past
And complicated reaching out
Made the human bridge collapse

Chorus:
And you thought, "why am I speaking?"
"There's no one to understand"
"My thoughts could fill a canyon"
"But they're lost within my hands."

So you thought about what to do
And you found it in your heart
To use thoughts you need to fill time
And join worlds torn apart
There's a healing come down to you
From the stars beyond despair
Where you can hear the angels crying
To the music you repair

Chorus 2
So you dont think, "why am I speaking?"
"Because no one understands"
"My thoughts might fill a canyon"
But I can share them with my hands."

Medium rock tempo fade..........

IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

© Copyright 2005 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2005-01-15 08:56 AM


ethome
Beautiful lyrics the melody almost write itsef. Enjoyed

Broken_Winged_Angel
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Small Town, Somewhere
2 posted 2005-01-15 08:58 AM


Very well done.

The words just flow down the page


MGROVES
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california
3 posted 2005-01-15 09:00 AM


wow another one giving goosebumps and chills  

bless you


passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-01-15 09:09 AM


Eric...wow! that chorus 2 is awesome! I would love to hear this one!
scorpio
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right...there
5 posted 2005-01-15 09:14 AM


I can hear this!!  Enjoyed.

believe in what your heart feels...

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2005-01-15 09:20 AM


And you thought, "why am I speaking?"
"There's no one to understand"
"My thoughts could fill a canyon"
"But they're lost within my hands."
my thoughts exactly, E~~~
enjoyable
hugs
M

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2005-01-15 09:21 AM



The emotions of your poet dancer
come through softly hard and clear,
even as the beat drives on...

Ethome, this is one of your best.

I would love to hear the music behind it.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2005-01-15 10:41 AM


Thank you Sy for the read and the kind response.

Broken- I'm so glad these words could flow for you...I appreciate the response.

MGROVES I appreciate the very kind words. Glad I can still give someone the chills..LOL! Thanks for dropping in.

Passing....The second chorus was meant to sum it up thanks for commenting on that and for the reply.

Scorpio I always appreciate it when a reader can hear one of these lyrics because that means I am half way there....I appreciate the response.

Maureen...Seems to turn out that way sometimes doesn't it? I always appreciate a visit from you thanks for dropping in.

Thanks Karilea I appreciate the reply in verse. I am working on some music for this one....Hope it does turn out to be one of my best...I appreciate the read.

Eric

IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

Janet Marie
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Posts 18554

9 posted 2005-01-15 11:12 AM


So you thought about your license
Your poetic just embrace
And you realized you knew enough
To turn knowledge into hate
And no one sought integrity
They stayed lost in thier past
And complicated reaching out
Made the human bridge collapse

Chorus:
And you thought, "why am I speaking?"
"There's no one to understand"
"My thoughts could fill a canyon"
"But they're lost within my hands."

So you thought about what to do
And you found it in your heart
To use thoughts you need to fill time
And join worlds torn apart
There's a healing come down to you
From the stars beyond despair
Where you can hear the angels crying
To the music you repair


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Eric, Eric...this is just so awesome...such a soulful scribe...filled with such empathy and humilty....wrapped up in your gift of harmonies and melodics...ya got some very cool lines in this poet pal...

And complicated reaching out
Made the human bridge collapse


"My thoughts could fill a canyon"
"But they're lost within my hands."

There's a healing come down to you
From the stars beyond despair
Where you can hear the angels crying
To the music you repair



Beautiful lyric and verse E-babers...
so very good to read you again.


Among the kingdom of the winds ...
perhaps there is one of elegant mind,
who has no need to intrude on the solitude of single things.

CB

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
10 posted 2005-01-15 02:30 PM


Aw Janet Marie my poet pet!

So good to hear from you.

Thanks for the more than kind words.

I got your new email addy and I thank you for that.

Love to ya!

Eric

IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

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