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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Off-Line The pour of me sweats out those feelings. Rain's hardness shattering the quiet. This storm is not over and can only result in invisible inked thoughts placed just so, journalized now, to be recalled from the deep freeze that will be occurring in the coming daze. Those words aren't there, the invitation of my lips held in waiting, the wondering of my feelings never asked upon and the lifting of the fog always in the distance. Serenaded by the tone deaf I hear you in my head and pace the floor searching, my reality lost in the unsaid, my eyes viewing the fault of mischance. Alterations needed, a tuck here and there to whether this out, a mind needing only pen and ink to shape tomorrow's pages, to battle the sighs sacrificing pleasure for calm, hope for acceptance losing less than what shall be gained. It is not for me to say, nor you to think... the worth no longer in wait. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenaded by the tone deaf I hear you in my head ~*~  I will be thinking about this poem throughout the day... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Serenaded by the tone deaf I hear you in my head and pace the floor searching, my reality lost in the unsaid, my eyes viewing the fault of mischance. Oh for the insanity of love How incredibly well written, you are a wonder |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome lines here...too many to quote amazing piece M |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I have been there. Good write, I liked the poem Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i understand; too much time, makes one lose interest, at least this one over here |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very well put! Great write. JL |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Enjoyed this!  ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M. tis a beauty...and so very crafty how your word substitution played into the mix very very well. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
The pour of me sweats out those feelings. Rain's hardness shattering the quiet. this is quite powerful - the entire write is very well done - stirs the emotions- SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Though it is sad in its conclusions, you surely have weathered it out in a masterful way, dear Maureen. ... it's tough to sacrifice hope ... but hope will plant itself again into your heart. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
It is not for me to say, nor you to think... the worth no longer in wait. Hey you...c'mere I know this too M, have been there, felt it and like you have ended up feeling the worth is no longer the wait and sometimes it hurts like hell, but when we get done "waiting" we usually move on to better things. It does get better hon. HUGS This is a  |
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