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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2005-01-14 01:54 AM



I sit
on my feet, smoking,
breathing and
my lungs freeze as I

have a conversation with a ghost who once loved me.

What is that, you say? Something
of luck, it
chilled my bones.. you became that tree.

But your skin is not so thick, you see,
your hands are still not clean.

there's still blood under your
paper thin fingernails...


I pretend to ignore it.


Sometimes, you
are an almond,
shaped and slightly red
with
tortured veins..

other times,
you're death,
wearing a
cherub's mask and
you claim that
you are the enemy of hatred and suffering...

..but I am no longer naive.

I am aware
that you despise me,
when you spit at me lies and
torture my tears until
they scream in pain.

No,
you are nothing and
you never loved me at all.

© Copyright 2005 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2005-01-14 02:00 AM


Megham, tremendous creativity in this one.... and a very intriguing read.  .....jo
A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 2005-01-14 02:42 AM


The Women of PIP are on a roll!

Bravo megan!

powerful and creative!

~ARH

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3 posted 2005-01-14 07:00 AM


  well done  


LeeJ
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4 posted 2005-01-14 07:21 AM


whewww, I'm in awe...

Good to be reading you again, I've so missed the talent of you...keep on penning...your a marvel

Tremendous write...bravo

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2005-01-14 09:05 AM


wish I wrote this...

awesome piece here Meg

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Canada eh.
6 posted 2005-01-14 09:08 AM


Excellent write Meghan..
Much  enjoyed the read.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Sunshine
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7 posted 2005-01-14 09:13 AM


my lungs freeze as I

have a conversation with a ghost who once loved me.

~*~

Ah...she's BACK!

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8 posted 2005-01-14 09:48 AM


Sad, Meg; but I found that even the warm memories can freeze-frame at sub zero temps.
Keep warm, put some gloves on and lots of pampering body lotion.

Margherita
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9 posted 2005-01-14 10:05 AM


Tough analysis, but so very well done.

Love, Margherita

Aenimal
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10 posted 2005-01-14 06:59 PM


you tear me to pieces with writes like these..awesome
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11 posted 2005-01-15 01:03 AM


wow,
wow,
  wow...powerful and impressive write.

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12 posted 2005-01-15 03:27 PM


What Raph said for sure, but it is that second in time that one "knows" that is monumental, and life changing.  Excellent Meg.

Carpe' Diem

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13 posted 2005-01-15 03:45 PM


WOW!

so many great phrases to be able to choose only one, creating magnificent images that flashed back and forth as I read this.

a

Maree

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

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14 posted 2005-01-15 11:36 PM


Welcome back! Great write!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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15 posted 2005-01-24 12:23 PM


Incredible images... this one leaves me breathless. *S*
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16 posted 2005-01-27 08:14 AM


Thats the second time I've ever read anything that actually made my eyes start to water, not quite to wetness, but just a little wet.  The first was one I wrote while I was in the process of writing it, but wow, you've gotten alot better.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
17 posted 2005-01-27 04:45 PM


leaves me feeling like i'm drowning in something i can totally feel, but will never understand.

i like it.

pandonov
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18 posted 2005-01-27 04:59 PM


it's a real beauty in it's pain. nice to read you again
GG
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19 posted 2005-01-27 06:33 PM


Very tragic,
but filled with bold strength.
Love this.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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