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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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0 posted 2005-01-12 04:31 PM



breaking glow sticks
stirring them into water
is love making just neon

that we dream with our eyes
or with our minds
when we are lover colors

you say your skin is new
now since I found it
and put it on backwards

to how it used to be
and those kids of hours
are really second lifetimes

making faces in the snow
then kissing hour mouths
in a dreamer's restless sleep

and only hour hands hold our only hours
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Dark

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Dark Angel
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Posts 10095

1 posted 2005-01-12 04:33 PM


Oh man...absolutely terrific!

Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

vandana
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2 posted 2005-01-12 04:35 PM


good read
JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA
3 posted 2005-01-12 04:36 PM


With ya on this one.

JL


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2005-01-12 04:40 PM



Looking through curvy glass
watching sand fall up...

yes...

You "Aliced" this one!

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
5 posted 2005-01-12 05:30 PM


Glow sticks and night diving - swimming in neon dreams - warm in the wet suit - yes - D - diggin' this -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Martie
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6 posted 2005-01-12 05:32 PM


DS

You play with words like no other!!  

*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
7 posted 2005-01-12 07:00 PM


This is so nicely written!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2005-01-12 07:19 PM


wonderful!
inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
9 posted 2005-01-12 10:42 PM


neon yellow is nice

i approve of the sudden change of face
xoxo

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
10 posted 2005-01-12 10:53 PM


enjoyed the word play tremendously
LeeJ
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11 posted 2005-01-13 08:43 AM


I'm throwing my hands up against my forehead
weak with sighs

your amazing, talented and man, what a flute you play....your like the pied piper...

superb!

Ratleader
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12 posted 2005-01-13 09:41 AM


I wish....in many ways and seasons...that I had written this.

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babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
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New York City
13 posted 2005-01-13 12:29 PM


damn.

tight spill, daddyman.

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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