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Darker Season
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 48
Wisconsin

0 posted 2005-01-10 06:37 PM


As She Goes
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I know a boy...
Who knows a girl...
Who knows the way
Into my world

She took a tour
She left her mark
Turned out the lights
The sky is dark

I walk along
This empty road
I’m watching as
The stars explode

They all fall down
I let them go
But in the end
She knows I know…

I know a boy...
Who knows a girl...
Who knows the way
Into my world

She ran away
She locked the door
And covered up
The things she swore

She swore she felt
It meant so much
The perfect words
The perfect touch

The perfect lie:
You wouldn’t go?
I’m waking up
And now I know

I know a boy...
Who stole a girl...

I know a boy
Who stole a girl...

I know a boy...
Who stole a girl...
Who knows the way
Into my world

I'm watching as she goes
Knowing that she knows

I know a boy...
Who knows a girl...



[This message has been edited by Darker Season (01-11-2005 05:41 PM).]

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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
1 posted 2005-01-10 07:03 PM


Excellent write Andrew...much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
2 posted 2005-01-10 11:17 PM


Ah yes, this should be read - so up she goes to the top so others might see-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

MGROVES
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california
3 posted 2005-01-11 03:31 AM


very nice


*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
4 posted 2005-01-11 08:33 PM


I like this!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2005-01-11 08:55 PM



Andrew

This is like a catchy tune...although the subject content is not joyous, it has a nice bounce..nice rhythm

I like the way it unfolds and comes around full circle...

enjoyed
___________ice/ford
  ><>

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
6 posted 2005-01-11 09:05 PM


Very well done.

Juju

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
7 posted 2005-01-11 09:54 PM


Good job, Andrew.  This sounds like it could be a song.
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
8 posted 2005-01-11 09:57 PM


Enjoyed this my friend...

jwesley

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