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Denise
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0 posted 2005-01-09 07:26 AM


I’ve checked out of reality
To live within a dream
A land of unfeigned kindliness
Where all is as it seems.

Duplicity does not exist
Can’t darken sun-filled skies
A promise made is always kept
For no one ever lies.

No sickness, grief and tragedy
To mar the human race
No broken hearts, no loneliness
Reside within this place.

It suits me well, so I'll just stay
Within this lovely dream
Where everything is beautiful
And is just as it seems.


1/9/05


© Copyright 2005 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Soulfisher
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1 posted 2005-01-09 07:39 AM


Sounds like a nice place to live in dreams.
I myself find it in the fly waters of life and perhaps some day the two will meet.

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2 posted 2005-01-09 10:34 AM


If only this could be more than just a dream. Lovely Denise. hugs, Chris

~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2005-01-09 11:56 AM


Denise
Thems my sentiments too, lovely write.

Susan
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4 posted 2005-01-09 12:03 PM


Ah, would that one could - or that life was as this is -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Enchantress
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5 posted 2005-01-09 01:44 PM


"It suits me well, so I'll just stay
Within this lovely dream
Where everything is beautiful
And is just as it seems."

How wonderful if we could all find a place such as this Denise.
What wonderful thoughts in this piece!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Startime55
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6 posted 2005-01-09 01:54 PM


I think I'll come and stay awhile for this world of yours suits me to a Tee...

Huan Yi
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7 posted 2005-01-09 10:38 PM



You've better dreams than I

TexUS
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8 posted 2005-01-09 10:41 PM


Denise,

I'd like to come live in your world too...save me a spot?


Great write! THANKS

1slick_lady
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9 posted 2005-01-09 10:43 PM


save me a seat there ok?

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10 posted 2005-01-09 11:13 PM


nicely done
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11 posted 2005-01-10 02:03 AM


This is exactly the place I'd love to be! Do you mind if I join you?

Nice piece ... hugs, Marti

A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows.
–St. Francis of Assisi

LeeJ
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12 posted 2005-01-10 07:06 AM


Hi Denise, I'd love to come live in your neighborhood and I'd give up everything to do so....smiles and hugs, thanks so much for the warmest of thoughts
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13 posted 2005-01-10 08:43 PM


Checking out of reality is an ongoing thing with me loved the concept in print!  You were missed, thanks for the offering.

Carpe' Diem

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14 posted 2005-01-10 09:32 PM


I'll e mail my reply, Denise, as this touched on a pattern for me.



thank you m'friend


Denise
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15 posted 2005-01-11 09:52 PM


You're all welcome to checkout with me anytime you please!

I look forward to the email, Karen!

Thank you all for your lovely replies!

Dr.Moose1
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16 posted 2005-01-12 09:13 PM


Denise,
What a lovely place you describe, kinda makes me homesick. Here's hoping that it all carries over into everyday life for you.
Doc

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17 posted 2005-01-12 09:14 PM


Sounds like utopia to me...nice write!  
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18 posted 2005-01-12 09:16 PM


This is so beautiful! A sigh brushing upon the lips of desire. Bravo!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Denise
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19 posted 2005-01-15 05:06 PM


Thanks, everyone! I'm glad you liked it!

Doc, how are things in Bewilderment nowadays?

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