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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-02-05 12:18 PM



Too old
To die well
He takes up—fishing

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DavePage
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1 posted 2005-02-05 01:33 PM


Gone fishing.

Like it.

Dave

Too young for hunting
He seeks
To ride anew

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2 posted 2005-02-05 10:09 PM


This describes my father in a nut shell who has gone on to fish Gods golden pond. I bet he's laughin right now cause he just caught another one while I wait on ice out several months away. Enjoyed the write
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3 posted 2005-02-06 10:23 AM


Wow -- you inspire me, and NOT to take up fishing!

I used to write my haiku/senryu without the count, only with rigorously short lines....because Japanese haiku translated to English don't find those line lengths unless the translator bends them into shape...which often dents the message.

Maybe I'll go back to that, or give it a try. I've been feeling a need for something new poetically, and polishing the old can be a start toward the new.

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Huan Yi
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4 posted 2005-02-07 12:09 PM



Ratleader,

Traditional Japanese Poetry- An Anthology,
Translator Steven D. Carter ISBN 0-8047-2212-9

An excellent book to have around.  Over a thousand poems.
Reading it creates an atmosphere in which eventually you’re
able to respond just by opening to a random page.  Most poems
are about experiences in ordinary life which really don’t change
from one generation to the next.

Glad you liked the read.

John

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5 posted 2007-04-23 06:36 PM


art of poem.

read.

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