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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2004-12-30 02:40 PM





I want to feel the world slip away
that moment
when your eyes find mine
and touch me
like no other
when your smile
says, ‘I know you’

I want to hold you close to me
from across the room
and know
you feel me
I want to watch you
watch me
and see your eyes
catch fire
when you hear my soul
softly sigh, ‘I love you’


I must admit I’ve always enjoyed
other people watching us
as they try to interpret the aura
and envy the electric emotions
they know are there
but cannot understand

it is a language
they will never speak...


~SEA~

© Copyright 2004 S.E. A - All Rights Reserved
Susan
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1 posted 2004-12-30 03:11 PM


This is so very, very good!  Am in love with it

  Susan

Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love

JL
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2 posted 2004-12-30 03:23 PM


A beauty!!
Depiction of true love to be emulated.
Excellent write SEA.

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2004-12-30 03:37 PM


when you put it like this
I wonder if they all know
how it feels


enjoyed this ms

Larry C
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4 posted 2004-12-30 04:27 PM


Susan,
That aura might melt the moon! Well done...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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5 posted 2004-12-30 05:05 PM


SEA~
How very, very touchingly lovely is this~
Sweet girl ... you know that this one knows me~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Margherita
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6 posted 2004-12-30 05:48 PM


Very lovely ...

Yes, I guess all lovers have different secret codes to communicate  ...

It's the language of the heart.

Love, Margherita

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7 posted 2004-12-30 06:57 PM


Very beautiful Susan~Much enjoyed.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

sim0riah
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8 posted 2004-12-30 07:21 PM


Very Very Nice!!! Much enjoyed!
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9 posted 2004-12-30 09:19 PM


This is so beautiful, Sea!
Juju
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10 posted 2004-12-30 09:28 PM


Nice poem,

Juju

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11 posted 2004-12-30 09:50 PM


love that ending! the whole poem is excellent!
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just out of reach
12 posted 2004-12-30 10:36 PM


I want to watch you
watch me
and see your eyes
catch fire
when you hear my soul
softly sigh, ‘I love you’


beautiful SEA.  hugs, Chris

~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

iliana
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13 posted 2004-12-31 07:49 PM


Got something special there, alright!  Happy New Year, SEA!
Lighthousebob
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14 posted 2005-01-01 01:45 PM


SEA,

Even from across the room, so to speak, I admire the eye language that you both share and the romanticism found therein and even though I can't fully interpret it, as your poem explains, still, I think you covered it very very well with the three simple words... 'I love you.' Again, very enjoyable reading. -Bob

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15 posted 2005-01-01 02:53 PM



Indeed, it seems only a very few fortunate
souls have that very hidden connection...
it's amazing when they don't set the room
ablaze!

Wonderful, m'dear!

*Alli4000*
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16 posted 2005-01-01 04:40 PM


"I want to watch you
watch me
and see your eyes
catch fire
when you hear my soul
softly sigh, ‘I love you’"


I loved that part . . . beautiful write SEA! Happy New Year!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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