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Huan Yi
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Waukegan


0 posted 12-29-2004 01:43 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Huan Yi


I like
watching you think,...
giving those cells of yours
value.

In harsh light,
pondering a poem,
those of your face,
suffused with years of thinking,            
soften the glare.

Because
in bed,
naked as crabs
outside our shells,...
I like that it takes
such simple keys
                        
to open a world where the sky is blue

and roses
bloom all year.

© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Elan
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State of Wide Eye


1 posted 12-29-2004 02:02 PM       View Profile for Elan   Email Elan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elan


And I am liking this one
very much...
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


2 posted 12-29-2004 02:07 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

very nice, John~~

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Tiersdin
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3 posted 12-29-2004 02:22 PM       View Profile for Tiersdin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tiersdin

enjoyed!

~tier
Enchantress
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4 posted 12-29-2004 02:52 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Beautiful thought...absolutely beautiful.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

~DreamChild~
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in your dreams


5 posted 12-29-2004 04:02 PM       View Profile for ~DreamChild~   Email ~DreamChild~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~DreamChild~

good write as always.
*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry


6 posted 12-29-2004 06:44 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Diddo to what DreamChild said...I love this!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

passing shadows
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displaced


7 posted 12-29-2004 11:09 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

awesome, as usual
TexUS
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8 posted 12-30-2004 01:25 AM       View Profile for TexUS   Email TexUS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TexUS

oh-so-lovely!




Great work.
Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle


9 posted 12-30-2004 07:58 AM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

This is lovely, Huan Yi. Very restful yet oh so colorful.
Susan Caldwell
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since 12-27-2002
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10 posted 12-30-2004 01:36 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

yes.

this is so sensual and loving.

well done John.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

serenity blaze
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11 posted 12-30-2004 08:18 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

beautiful
Juju
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In your dreams


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Intresting
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on the threshold of a dream


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This is superb... I like very much! *S*
Drauntz
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14 posted 04-28-2007 06:29 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

(one of the best.  you wrote so wonderfully.
be careful the eyes...tree has many eyes, some may belong to human or ? )

I like
watching you think,...
giving those cells of yours
value..... (I love the expression of gift.)

In harsh light,
pondering a poem,
those of your face,
suffused with years of thinking,            
soften the glare.
( harsh/soften... the inter-reaction of light of Bulb and light of thinking)

Because
in bed,
naked as crabs
outside our shells,...
I like that it takes
such simple keys....
(I like that you mentioned this in a very casual way...in fact it is the simple cells's work to sense a blue sky and to imagine a rose blooming year arround...in CA it is. In Il it is not. and how perfectly use the word of KEY then OPEN..so poetically express the view of a poet.
                        
to open a world where the sky is blue

and roses
bloom all year.

(wonderful, sooooo beautiful)
 
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