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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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You touch my hand And the world collapses To a tiny sphere Where only we exist. My vision does not extend Beyond your eyes. You touch my skin And the universe explodes. Every glistening shard of me Revolves around you; I am alive Because you love me. You touch my heart And it expands to make A better me. Filled with love for you I am omnipotent And totally helpless... You touch me. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my..this is sooo beautiful!! The feeling sure doesn't get much better than this. Lovely lovely write! Hugs~ In the midst of winter, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 this is very nice."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, yes, the power of touch and how beautifully you've expressed it. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
lovely Suthern... ~smiling~ at memories  M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
It is so very nice when can be touched in just this way Suthern. Wonderful write. [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (12-29-2004 02:30 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ I *sigh* with sweet understanding of this piece~ And ... once more, YOU touch me tenderly~  Love and lots of *Huglets* to you dear lady~  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, a beautiful piece that well illustrates that in-love feeling! Thanks for sharing this. misc'e |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Beautiful writing, Suthern. And it's wonderful to be touched by another in this way, isn't it? Hugs,  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is simply lovely - stirring -  SusanEvery action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Enchantress, Susan Caldwell, Honeybunch, nakdthoughts, GS, Marge, miscellanea, garysgirl & Susan: Thank you so much, kind ladies. *S* I appreciate your comments so much… thank you for reading! *S* |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This is beautiful! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Sometimes I feel like that. A lovely write. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
...and you...have touched everyone who read this. Search these forums as you may, you'll not find a more beautiful way of saying it....as much a blessing as a poem. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
I've felt this before, and it is wonderful. Loved the way you wrote it... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern, I feel the joy in this and am happy for you. & Happy New Year! jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You touch my hand And the world collapses ======================== what a delightful read.... ya had me from the opening hook.... perfect impact in your analogies and personifis...the emotion and elation resonates from this...one would have to be made of stone not to smile as reading. Now about this part... I am omnipotent is that some big fancy poetic word for glowing??? hehe *EG* OH and one more thing........ DOES HE HAVE A BROTHER?????????????? yayayaya  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh yeah. This is beautiful poetry. JL |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent romantic writing...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful and passionate. Sigh ... Love, Margherita |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Words like yours could melt a monitor, you know. Well done. Here is a chance for a "smartypants" answer! When the bucks are gone and the car’s waitin’ for repo. Do you wonder if freight trains are hopped near the depot? When the food clerk says your coupons are expired, Do you think “Maybe food stamps come when you’re fired.” When the tires are worn and the tranny is groaning Do you hope that solace might come from moaning? When your shoulders bend from burden borne Do you wonder why life is so forlorn? HNY Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I know this feeling very very well but you said it much better than ever i could bravo! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, my friends... your words do more than touch me... they anchor me... I thank you so much! |
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