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Blues To The End
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Blues To The End |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Bring it blue to me With B.B. fondling Lucile in a passionate throe Of eye closing release Each forceful pluck one string closer you know To the edge of oblivion And I’ll wrap it up for you In pages of scribbled notes half finished in rhyme Or some groping reach to find Persian meter Of once upon someone’s time Hell with the constructs Dictated by the P O E T R Y police I’ll find my own lines on the white to write So close your eyes Or blink twice Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips Begging the touch of some unknown tongue That might sip dew from the cracks I got no reason to play the same Brick brake tune of words that might grace Some small town memory Or to hum anything but the best of vibes With trembling lips against the reed of her If it’s true Then the south done won after all you know If it ain’t Then Billie lied before she tasted too much And her passing don’t mean a thing Just like mine won’t When you’ve forgotten how it was to feel The drop to bass and the rhythm of drums Played on skin with lights low Embracing too many deaths you already had Looking for one more To put you in the realms of ecstasy So bring it to me blue And I’ll listen while you Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears Bottled up inside for aging And when you are through I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue And mix them with the ashes Of what you burned To stain again some indecent lines On this the blue Of paper white |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
uh huh...yep.... between the lines a four letter f word (fine) is whispered kewl c man |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you sir... not sure about the four letter word in there if it is fine or or fake...lol... your eyes are always appreciated ... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hell with the constructs Dictated by the P O E T R Y police I’ll find my own lines on the white to write So close your eyes Or blink twice Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips Begging the touch of some unknown tongue That might sip dew from the cracks I got no reason to play the same ~*~ The four letter f word has been expanded to read "fantastic!" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes..... the South definitely won that round....and some others. This is so smooth, like the virtuosity it shows....Jazz does have two meanings....one of which is (fine), and the other, (!) the other.....and your jazz? Oh yeah..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Sunshine... you're being kind ma'am... just a few drops of spittle here mixed with the ashes of a few tunes... trying to make my own ink... Ed... sir... you are exceedingly kind... and patient to continue to read my meager droppings here... I appreciate the eyes..and the read thanks all... your time and your eyes are appreciated.. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
So bring it to me blue And I’ll listen while you Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears Bottled up inside for aging And when you are through I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue And mix them with the ashes Of what you burned To stain again some indecent lines On this the blue Of paper white Even though I can't always find the words sufficient enough to reply to your wonderful writes here on the blue...I still love reading them. And, though my "blues" don't sound nearly as good as yours, I sure do feel them sometimes. Hugs, Ethel  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, my... oh my oh my oh my... Your poetry always impresses me... today, it's absolutely blowing me away... and here... gives me music along with the words. Fantastic, indeed!!! *S* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue And mix them with the ashes Of what you burned To stain again some indecent lines On this the blue Of paper white" Ah...this is forceful.. and I love forceful.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That's easy -- I think you're one of the best, if not the best, singers in this choir.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oooh. Can you play the slide with a longneck too?  Now you knew I'd show up for this... off to sell my soul at the crossroads now. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I recall once you saying you enjoyed the blues..... but...I enjoy it when you enjoy the blue even more.  oh yes.....F is the word....FRIGGIN great.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "So bring it to me blue And I’ll listen while you Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears Bottled up inside for aging And when you are through I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue" Okay...I can do this!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yah'll's ink, Suh... is most desahedly blew-bluhd... Spit ah li'l moh. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so enjoyed |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips Begging the touch of some unknown tongue That might sip dew from the cracks I got no reason to play the same Brick brake tune of words that might grace Some small town memory Or to hum anything but the best of vibes With trembling lips against the reed of her" Fantastic!!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Friggin’ fantastic! Enjoyed!! JL |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
One word..Wow!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
what a sweet taste *sighs* eyes and thighs in synch smiling, hearing Miss Billie in this |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Really heard the soul in this. Thanks for sharing this terrific piece. ....jo |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
wow, this is so much fun...i don't exactly love the poetry police very much either |
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