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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-12-28 06:55 PM


Another part of a theme called lightly


Backstreet somewhere
Only chewing time
Brick walls supporting
Only chewing rhyme
Met a girl lunchtime
She only worked late
Took me for a long time
Dancing on a grate
Took men for food
Fed me soup
Took me for something
Made me whoop
Tribal name was Wong
Family name was Foo
Still remember her face
Never would have come back
To this place

But it is all different now
We dont abuse people
We dont avoid them
We dont fear them

I'd trust that woman
More
Because she was a woman
Who only robbed me
Lightly

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-12-28 08:10 PM



Steal my wow, would you?
I think you would do so, lightly...

this is a marvelous trip down
rhyme and word play

and if this is just "imagination"...
then I applaud you...
and if this is reality sketched?

I bow.

JL
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2 posted 2004-12-30 02:34 PM


Took me on a mental journey back to the shores of the Tonkin.

Very nice write.

JL


Susan
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3 posted 2004-12-30 03:17 PM


This was great - made me smile - especially the ending -

Susan

DavePage
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4 posted 2004-12-30 05:25 PM


Sunshine

and if this is just "imagination"...
then I applaud you...
and if this is reality sketched?

I  bow.

Sunshine - beside the drafts and words of poetry on my site, I have put the drafts of 12 - which was originally "Standby to Jump Out, Standby and Jump", plus my ideas on "Hawk and the Lady" and I've put this in "Lightly" and load that up.

All things have an idea of reality but the danger I feel si that if you try to control ideas rather than trust the ideas to develop themselves that all you can only write is what you see.

There is a Lady with a tribal name of Wong and a Family name of Kee.   I was in the Far East in 1967-69 but in Singapore.

On another point:

I used to play football outside Wormwood Scrubs Prison as a kid.

My blood group is "B".

I have at times said goodbye to girls at Stations and also Hello in the rush hour at Bank station to a girl like some stone in a tide pouring in.

At some point a woman called Karilea may work in a French owned Bistro in Hamburg at the edge of the Universitat.

We all take our images but the images take us further than we could ever hope to go.

Dave


JL

Took me on a mental journey back to the shores of the Tonkin.

It does get interesting JL.

Dave

Susan

This was great - made me smile - especially the ending -

Thanks Susan - humour hits from all angles - in a street in Singapore, if it was a lovely lady, it was a man - Bugee Street I think it was called (now destroyed, I'm told).

Curfew and safe areas - at least I was robbed in a safe area in Singapore and the next time was in Maastricht where I was just attacked and fought back.

Maybe people who liked to write do go out to find ideas, see sites, listen to people and words.

Maybe I will write, but the hard work I have had the chance to do and I wrote poetry instead.

Dave

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