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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2004-12-28 09:13 AM


You’d dance the corners of my soul
Into round fallings where edges cleft the palate
Leaving split speech still to stutter
In my own harsh way
Against the roof of scars
   Licked gently by tomorrows tongue

Then fall

Free tumbled as stone passed by the eyes
In a humble version of open up
         Let me in to feel again the way
It is when leaves burn in flame
  Not the smoking smolder of grey to scent
Crisp thoughts

If I extended my arms and you
   In a run away from something softer than
The brittle sheets of ice so sculpted
  For the pleasure of empties and passers by
Who think to selves thoughts of prying apart
The join of thighs so they
           Can sink their lips into some soft flesh
Or bury a head in some hole
That they do not have to see
                                  Come sunrise

Slipped on the slick of my heart
    You might indeed sway

For precipices have some error for margin
    Given statistical relevance and reason
To measure that way
The center of gravity and how momentum
  Pushes notes over one another in a jumble
      Unable to stop the music you’d have me make

  I’ll play the fiddle woman

      But all fiddlers                           Must get pay

So drop the veils and strip bare the skin
    I’d see the veins you swear
           Burn with cashed out fire
Then maybe I’ll make change
Of broken C’s

    While you and I sip
                                           The air

We bleed


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-12-28 09:15 AM


...Leaving split speech still to stutter

...of broken C's

~*~

So good to see this...
and you.

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2004-12-28 09:36 AM


"So drop the veils and strip bare the skin"

ah, dearest Poet, aka fiddler, I ask..can you do the same?

  


"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2004-12-28 09:41 AM


Ms Sunshine... thank you ma'am.. for the read and the words

ms susan... lmao.. you crack me up...
  thanks for the eyes... and the read ma'am

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2004-12-28 09:59 AM


Yanno? Your use of imagery is so refined and perfected....

and this?You’d dance the corners of my soul
Into round fallings where edges cleft the palate
Leaving split speech still to stutter
In my own harsh way
Against the roof of scars
   Licked gently by tomorrows tongue

Then fall
Is worthy of more than just a damn....
it's more like.....BRAVA!!!!  


babygirlwlove
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5 posted 2004-12-28 12:33 PM


damn. do. i . love. this...

**blu

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-12-28 12:37 PM


.........Yes.
well done Sir.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Dark Angel
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7 posted 2004-12-28 04:22 PM


We bleed

yes, yes we do...how I love this Sir.

mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

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8 posted 2004-12-28 06:03 PM


Great write!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Tiersdin
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9 posted 2004-12-29 12:18 PM


*wow*

~tier

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