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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-12-27 09:30 PM

Does It Not Hurt?

china cups hold tear drops afraid to cry
and does it not hurt because you say so
try crawling inside me there is room
for…
you are the one that makes me feel so small
thin shadow made by a greater boundary
a silhouette made against the measure of light
all can change at the length of an eyelash
how can something so full end up so empty
cuts made pasted of a negative on a positive
grey is the line between black and white
a place cast of me traced from an illusion

just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2004-12-27 10:16 PM

Ah, would that it could not hurt just because . . . very thoughtful and emotive piece here-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2004-12-28 09:33 AM

Ow, this hurts to read....hurts good, to someone who likes quality in poetry, but the other kind to someone who doesn't like to see friends having heartaches. I think I understand more than you've said here -- and that adds an extra level of that "other kind" for me, as it should for any who think of themselves as your friend.

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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2004-12-28 09:45 AM

always impressed when I read you ma'am.. and always touched by the depths you can convey..

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2004-12-28 09:48 AM

"how can something so full end up so empty
cuts made pasted of a negative on a positive
grey is the line between black and white
a place cast of me traced from an illusion"

oh...that is good...bravo!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2004-12-28 10:01 AM

this is so good Helen...
and leaves me wishing it didnt have to
hurt so bad...
hugs.....

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2004-12-28 03:28 PM

some fantastic lines, my favorites are the 1st about the china cup tears and the one about the eyelash length

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

7 posted 2004-12-28 06:14 PM

Wow...i'm just speechless.

~Alli~

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SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

8 posted 2004-12-28 10:51 PM

Wonderful poem, Helen. And yes, it does hurt.

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