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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2004-12-27 12:08 PM




I

gone without warning

tide ebbing beyond despair

water’s cleansing wrath


II

ancient Tsunami

angry god in ocean’s form

awakened sleeper


III

dreaming living dreams

humanity reminded

life’s a fragile thought


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Martie
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1 posted 2004-12-27 01:14 AM


icebox

The clips that I saw were very scary....I used to have a dream as a child of a tidle wave....it scared me then, it scars me now.

Well done!  

passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-12-27 03:37 AM


deep thinking here

you've touched me, yes

ice
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3 posted 2004-12-27 05:21 AM


­
­­"ancient Tsunami

angry god in ocean’s form

awakened sleeper"

All powerful, is Poseidon
When he raise up from the sea
To probe shore dwellers, with his trident.
Truly, he is "an angry god in oceans form"

Your compact view of the event is true to your form.
Not one word in excess, not one word needed more.

___________ice/ford
   ><>

­

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2004-12-27 09:36 AM


hideous reminder.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2004-12-27 09:44 AM


icebox
I'll bet your have allot of these in the old fridg.

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6 posted 2004-12-27 06:01 PM


nodding here, I had tried to imagine, and even with my most vivid thoughts in play, I couldn't.

one drop at time seems benign, but oh, the power of it, in forces joined.

*hard hugs* wise man

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7 posted 2004-12-28 09:39 AM


Ooh, stay away from that Ripple -- stuff'll rot your innards....

But do keep writing these, because your senryu are getting better and better.

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VAS
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8 posted 2004-12-28 11:36 AM


Oh, my, the last one is my absolute favorite!!!POWERFUL**

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

*Alli4000*
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9 posted 2004-12-28 06:22 PM


Amazing!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

iliana
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10 posted 2004-12-29 01:40 AM


Ah, yes.  And.....to test our humanity, perhaps.  ........jo
anwaarhassan
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11 posted 2004-12-29 03:16 AM


Ice,
Excellent write...and so appropriate in light of the recent tragedy in Asia...Well done!!

Anwaar

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12 posted 2004-12-29 04:10 AM


it was a very tragic hapenning...a powerful write
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