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God . . . . . Senryu
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God . . . . . Senryu |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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 Written in the sand, the line curves to my arm's length.... Round, blue horizon.... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
*Smiling* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That's a nice curve, too.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I love this! Can you translate what is written in the sand, it's kind of hard to read.  |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
wonderful! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A beautiful and most picturesque thought expressed here regarding the swoop of God's arm. Thank you for sharing. -Bob |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
very much enjoyed this one |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Good thought, Martie...thanks! It's another Senryu I put there, for whatever bird left the feather I was using to scratch it in the sand. His many feathers bear him up so easily; I must fly with one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The Senryu in the sand is very touching to me, Ed...because I have a feather collection and I love birds. Thanks for the translation! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
It's actually a pick-up version of one I wrote some time ago..... Crow Feather Jealousy The crow, flinging scraps of voiceless sound at me, flies away heavy. Am I so jealous, throwing a rock to chase him, glad a loose quill falls? He has a thousand feathers; I must fly with only one. I wasn't gonna squat there and scribble all THAT in the sand! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh-- and I KEPT the feather! Not a collector except for the occasional very special gift I find, but it does feel kinda nice to have it sitting in front of me as I type this. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
 Happy Holidays! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Lovely - as is the story held within the heart of the penning - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
The story is as good as the writing, Ed. I enjoyed both. Well done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Pure art! Bravo!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Good message both past and present. Good and comnforting Senyru. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It was more than worth a bit of squint to read the senyru in the picture... and squint I did... not realizing the translation came later! *G* Actually... I'm glad I didn't realize... for I could feel each letter's tracing in the sand. *S* (I read it right, by the way... *G*) This is one of the reasons I consider you a poet without peer... one work inspires another inspires another inspires another poet... and the layering gives only gain... nothing is lost. Beautiful work, my friend... I think His smile curves with this one. *S* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you are poet, you are artista beautiful Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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