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Frozen Rain
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Snow drifts in a flurry however the flakes remain imperfect in their patterns. Like the sound of your laughter I imagined blowing across my bangs hanging stars from my eye lashes blushing rosy on my cheeks. Like cashmere in the mist used to keep me warm was the purest joy I had ever known seems so trite and cliche' when my memory strays and becomes meaningless. As the temperature drops clouding my cover in a shiver I'll never forget to remember the burst of color in the sunlight arranged in a spring bouquet hard pressed between the pages would be my valentine in the meantime. Those seedlings so far and few between now feed the sound of silence piercing the heart at a distance lacing the edges of my sighs framing a picture of you in mind gives me no reason to miss you now, but I do. Like a frozen rain trickles down a stream condensing on my pain enough to fill a reservoir no longer draws me in or dares me to cross a pond that wouldn't hold me. Even though I still look for you waving out my window in the heat of the night easing the winter chill that softens my smile reflecting in my rearview going nowhere. As a footnote in the aftermath where the water falls and rises melting in the stillness before crashing against the damn that would break me. ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bluesy, I was fine and now I'm crying! What a beautiful write and so very moving. My best to you. Happy Holidays! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
now feed the sound of silence piercing the heart at a distance lacing the edges of my sighs framing a picture of you in mind gives me no reason to miss you now, but I do.  you come back and get my crying all over again  i miss him too, and him and him and him and him and the next him and him........ aaaaaahhhhhhhhh why do we do it? what's the alternative tho? wishing you love back my blonde bombshell drop me a line sometime,while i'm still standing |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
Blue---well kiddo, you still got it! Emotion filled and oh so felt, wow! Atov~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
girl, nobody writes emotion the way that you do and with your style.... You have missed dear friend, it is good to see you hear. May the holidays and New Years hold all that is good and wonderful for you. Be safe and May God Hold you in his hands...  ~D~ The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezzzzy rain when frozen is still the love drop just moving slower it will hurry again when god gives it warm and says go find her and make her mouth wet with a smile enjoyed this much hon |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bluesylady, so good to read your wonderful words again! You've been missed. Have a wonderful holiday season. Hugs, Chris Don't forget my presents!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Snow drifts in a flurry ~&~ Oh, you got me from the first wordplay on... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, it's so good to see you. You have been in my thoughts. I always love reading your excellent work, my friend. You always write your heart. Hugs to you, Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori So good to see you, Lori! As always you paint your heart beautiful!  |
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milkweed Junior Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 42fields of gold |
This poem flows so well and it is so easy to identify with your words. I can see so many pictures. Season's best to you. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write! Eric |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Like the sound of your laughter I imagined blowing across my bangs hanging stars from my eye lashes blushing rosy on my cheeks. so lovely, Lor... wishing you the best holiday season ever~~ love and hugs M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy -- you always capture emotions perfectly and this poem is no exception but it is exceptional! Happy holidays and I hope they will be blessed! .....jo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good write |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you are gorgeous lady blues |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It is difficult for me to find the words sometimes to thank you for all the nice things you said....makes me feel that my writing is worthwhile, and I thank you so much for encouraging me. Happy Holidays to each of you, and every good wish in the New Year. With love, and many many hugs~ Bluesy~ |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Whenever you may doubt The beauty of your verse, Reread these posts and praise we send; You really could do worse. We all take pen to make our stand And tell the world our tale.` It's when we open up our hearts, It's then they're free to sail. Well done, Bluesy and a most Merry Christmas! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow...  Happy Holidays! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is always a pleasure to read your work. Grand wishes for the new year. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So much behind this....and reading it I can see you as if the poem were a window and you standing behind it, the human center of a structure made to be transparent while keeping out the cold winds. This poem is excellent, and I'm pushing the Library button. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Deep Sigh. Like the reservoir in your poem, your words are overflowing with expression and deep deep emotion. I loved your writing. Thank your for sharing. -Bob |
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