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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2004-12-17 11:30 PM


they gather here, these human shapes
with ship-wrecked eyes and faces
carved like stone

they think me dormant
and do not see my eyes have light

in this prehistoric sky

their mouths, too busy and hooked
in the throb of genitalia and the swell
of fish thigh high and trembling

this is my life,
i suppose - and for me
it is long and moaning
day after night after day
watching ghost ships in the fog
and humans copulate like dogs

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

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1 posted 2004-12-17 11:49 PM


I am tucking this one into my library...sheesh woman! I always enjoy reading you awesome!
passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-12-18 05:42 AM


ship-wrecked eyes

*sigh*

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3 posted 2004-12-18 06:20 AM



Sounds of waves slapping
logs of the pier

and you found
the wash underneath...

well done, Maree!

Ah, this series, for the book, yes?

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4 posted 2004-12-18 10:43 AM


I see them! I SEE them! The imagery in this poem is simply incredible....reading it is like looking at a clear sharp picture, that morphs into another, then another....it would have been absolutely riveting even if the theme of it didn't rattle my cage!

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Martie
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5 posted 2004-12-18 11:36 AM


Maree

"day after night after day
watching ghost ships in the fog
and humans copulate like dogs"

Such fabulous personification....got me thinking about what it would be like, no...not to be a lighthouse, you've got that covered, but something.  

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2004-12-18 12:41 PM


day after night after day
watching ghost ships in the fog
and humans copulate like dogs

wow!!
what a look through those eyes you've given
us down below; and to think, that boy promised me no one would see us under the boardwalk

wranx
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7 posted 2004-12-19 02:54 AM


Can't let this one slip by.

You have to knit these all together one day, so we might read them one after the other.

Did I mention they are wondermuss!

Margherita
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8 posted 2004-12-19 07:01 AM


they think me dormant
and do not see my eyes have light

in this prehistoric sky


An impressive creation!

Sending love to you, highly talented Poetess!

Margherita

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9 posted 2004-12-19 03:10 PM


Awesome write!! I enjoyed this...

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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10 posted 2004-12-20 05:31 AM


::shaking head:::

yeah... what Ed Said....


Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2004-12-20 10:48 AM


yes.  superb.  

masterful.

I would love to see them all together as well.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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12 posted 2004-12-20 10:56 AM


enjoyed
Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2004-12-20 02:15 PM


damn woman!
pickin my jaw up.
Every time I click on your name
I am never, ever disapointed.  

littlewing
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14 posted 2004-12-20 06:43 PM


they think me dormant
and do not see my eyes have light


you never do know who is watching . . .
what a perspective, Maree and I agree with Ed . . . please put these together . . .

Dark Angel
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15 posted 2004-12-22 03:20 PM


I want to thank you all for your kind replies I appreciate them and you all so very much.

"Knit these all together" one day?

Hmmmm, soon perhaps.

Thank's all  



Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

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16 posted 2004-12-22 05:28 PM


"ship-wrecked eyes"

That's one of those images I know very well, and didn't know that I knew it until just now.

M'lady is artiste.


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17 posted 2004-12-23 12:18 PM


I'm a baboon for good poetry and especially poetry about lighthouses and so I went back to read the other eleven (couldn't find 12, yet) and I do like this portrayal of the Lighthouse the very very best. I love how grandiose, weather worn, indestructible, and eternal the Lighthouse stands in relationship to us mere mortals... and the love making scene is pretty darn good too. (Smiles) Enjoyed reading this series very much. -Bob
iliana
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18 posted 2004-12-23 12:44 PM


Maree, you are the sea!  No, you are the lighthouse.  No, you are one fine poet!  Happy holidays!   .....jo
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19 posted 2004-12-24 05:31 PM


...

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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20 posted 2004-12-24 08:48 PM


Sweet lady, I sure did think that I had read this,
but I don't see where I replied. this is excellent
writing, just as all yours are. Here's a sigtag
that I made a few days ago. I thought that it went
very well with your poem.
Hugs,
Ethel


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