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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Parting Parting Fragmenting Thin ideas Swirling clouds With moments Aimlessly loosed Above the wreckage Of a peaceful moment In a beautiful sky In Ideas Vanishing As bolts Fly |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
With moments Aimlessly loosed Above the wreckage Of a peaceful moment In a beautiful sky oh how beautiful this is! Well done, Happy Holidays. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 nice! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Whew! I felt that! Parting can be such sweet sorrow!  Linda |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks but I still think I need to rework it. I just cant get my head around it. Something is there but I can't trap it. I might have to lengthen the lines and try and get the flow better. Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write Dave... I can grasp the emotions here. Hugs~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write Dave!  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I wanted to add this to my library...forgot.  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
parting is never easy especially when it isn't really wanted but know it is needed then the soul is tormented and taunted your time of stay has exceeded and ghosts of past forever haunted i do not know where that came from it just came . but i feel it means something please help me understand forgive me this may seem weird but all this just came out of nowhere. so it must mean something . i feel weird right now, i feel like deleting this , but i believe things happen for a reason and for some reason i am being drawn to your words tonight |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Perfecto Dave! Happy Holidays!"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Enchantress Thanks - Happy Christmas to you. *Alli4000* Alli Have a Good One Alli I've now started to wade through all my stuff over the years but I virtually always post new stuff here. Finally getting around to the web site has made me really think as I go through work, and the Publishable section is a bit "pie in the sky" and the working drafts section is getting longer and longer but at least I have finally got a basic read only site up and some control over the work I need to do. Have a Good Christmas MGROVES In the same way things start on high expectations, we cling and sometimes both want to cling for ever, having taken the plunge. Other times we want to escape and come up with cheap excuses to do so. Sometimes one is stronger than the other in will and feels it is right to part and they are right or wrong but saying goodbye when it means I've got out of there may often be the right thing to do and the most bodged activity there is. Susan Caldwell Thanks Susan. Have a Good Christmas. Thanks to all who commented. Have Good Christmas and a Great New Year. regards Dave |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thankyou |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Marsha Write words that will turn the world on it's axis. regards Dave |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“In Ideas Vanishing As bolts Fly” . Yep, thoughts and the like… Enjoyed the read DavePage JL |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks JL. I was a bit surprised to see parting come back. It is one of my "just want to write" brigade. Dave |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
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