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May I Say... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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May I Say... The quiet is deafening hearing my own breath, feeling its warmth surrounding me in emptiness... and promises, semi-promises lose their worth. What's in a word when falling on deaf ears, those that may hear but not understand. Detailing still invisible to eyes that fantasize and abbreviate instead, painting a portrait without its element of design. Pain beneath the surface, voiced to no one, masked in a softness, a question mark in gray. Near enough to twist, a single strand to interlock, a single rose of red to remind and me with dovetailing thoughts. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
You are incredible! The quiet is deafening hearing my own breath, feeling its warmth surrounding me in emptiness... and promises, semi-promises lose their worth. Not the ones we make to ourselves....hugs What's in a word when falling on deaf ears, those that may hear but not understand. Detailing still invisible to eyes that fantasize and abbreviate instead, painting a portrait without its element of design. You are the designer...and the ultra glorious element...... Pain beneath the surface, voiced to no one, masked in a softness, a question mark in gray. Near enough to twist, a single strand to interlock, a single rose of red to remind and me with dovetailing thoughts. Absolutely stunning rhyme... I give you a rose for Christmas...one for health, one for sounds of joy, one for a puppy licking your face, another for a child's smile to grasp your heart, and one from me.... Love Lee J. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I felt this one with you M, and you do your craft so very well that one can't help but feel with you. Very well done M, and holiday hugs. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Maureen, This line: "a question mark in gray" was outstanding!! More questionable than just a mere question is a question in gray...again outstanding.. loved this!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
It seems you improve your style with every turn---so smoothly done and pleasing to the eyes. Lovely! ~Atov |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Very nice! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write Maureen! I really felt your words today. heart hugs~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
We're all ambivalent. Yin-yang, good-bad, moods up and down. If you cut us lengthwise we don't mirror but oppose the other half. To delve into this dichotomy takes courage and is a sign of maturity that one would hope would lead to acceptance (of self). To deny the dark or insist on total light is folly. Enjoyed |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If you cut us lengthwise we don't mirror but oppose the other half. very interesting Richard...I was once told (by a doctor) that I was very lopsided especially in my face which he tried to explain was my reason for headaches... needless to say his diagnosis gave me a migraine thinking about it.  Thank you all for your responses, some days I runaway with my thoughts.... ~smiling~ M |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
feeling this - laughing at the lopsided - say what? Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh how I do understand this one. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Susan C, Sue, Lee, Donna, Atov, Kristabell, Nancy and Susan ( yes, my face he said one side was higher than the other... oh well, I have one hip lower than another, too... I use to hem ( when wearing very short skirts ) one side more than another making it difficult to ever "handmedown" my clothing. hmmm...memories M |
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