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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2004-12-15 01:26 AM


Night echoes my need of finality
to the endless sway of debate
and carries my own distinctive tone
across the plains of the yes and the no
then into the sky of the maybe, don’t know.

A season for each and I spin clock-wise
from cold in the winter alone
to the summer sun heat of desire
too quickly for me to assimilate
what happened in autumn and spring.

Where was I then when barren the trees;
did I smile at the shoot of new leaves?
Did I believe, foresee, perceive,
or sleep through the process of dreams?

Last night the air split asunder my cares
as lightening sped through the sky
trailing the words of do what you must
to realize all of your dreams.

What can I do but poetically spin
through seasons on to the end
for all of my dreams lie over the sea
beyond the hope of being real.

Yes, I will leave, no, I will stay,
maybe tomorrow will do,
and I don’t know why I bother to pray
when my dream spins anti-clockwise.

Debate, debate, the ruination of soul,
until echoes of hope, need, desire,
fade into the air permanently  
and my own distinctive tone
simply one day ceases to be!


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GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
1 posted 2004-12-15 04:50 AM


This is excellent!
I know I've been lost in that indecision
that just eats at the heart, before.
And I love the analogies with the seasons.
Great poem.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2004-12-15 05:48 AM


and carries my own distinctive tone
across the plains of the yes and the no
then into the sky of the maybe, don’t know.
like it very much
*s
M

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-12-15 07:12 AM


this carries the reader to a place in your heart...a wonderful place to visit and learn
You are a master of art...which you leave for all of us to discern...taking it to compliment each our own...lovely writing

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
4 posted 2004-12-15 02:57 PM


Thank you so much Alyssa, 'M', and Lee, for the read.  I guess we all experience the same things from time to time and the amazing thing is that we all survive through them.
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