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amy's splintering hopes
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amy's splintering hopes |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Her hair was brown. Plain brown, and fell above her shoulders. She'd rarely wash it 'cause she hated standing naked in right-out-of-the-shower-cold, staring at that thing she was... "Ugly and expendable." She cried and swore, because that's all she saw, I guess. And no one disagreed with her. No one really cared. Every night she dreamt of building a dream, but two-by-fours and nails only splintered her hopes. At sun rise she would curse her life, because she wanted to be dead. Then mourned the time that passed her as she died a little more. He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. [This message has been edited by GG (12-14-2004 08:41 AM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Oh wow...this is so poigant and softly sorrowful. What a truly excellent expression. Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::nodding head:: captured this well ma'am.... nicely done.... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
agreeing; you captured this well. cathy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a sadly beautiful write |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
agreed with everyone...sad yet amazing write.  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Eric, unfortunately I tend to do the sorrowful writes quite often. I'm glad you found poignency in this... despite that it isn't all too good.  Thank you...Cpat, you're far too kind, 'cause I know you know this one isn't very good lol... You've no idea how much I appreciate your reading and replying Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy,  you're awesome. Thank you so much!Dix, we tend to know the sad and beautiful, don't we? ... Ali, Thank you much. Amy is a sad yet amazing girl, too... So I'm honored you think I caught her the way she is. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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