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Christmas Cake

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Huan Yi
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There's an anxiousness
about the way you dress.
I think at one time you may have been
unattractive.

Somewhat at a loss,
you dance and talk,
and no one listens.
The face a faith no one believes in.
A body you worked for
the great white whale
that some assail
hoping after together to tell their tales,
harpooning
an emptiness.

And yet perhaps
through all of this
nonsense not knowing words,
in an ever smaller corner,
in the back of eyes that show no light,
a young girl
wearing glasses
watches the men,
one of whom
might be her dream,

passing by
not seeing her,

unaware
that you are there

still waiting.

© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-13-2004 10:10 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

ouch
and yet, perhaps
tomorrow
JamesMichael
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2 posted 12-13-2004 11:16 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed...James
A Tone of Voice
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To me poetry is conveying the thoughts of one to the other, connecting dots if you will, you did this.....I like it!

~Atov
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4 posted 12-14-2004 11:47 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

I like the way this tells a story.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Ethel
GG
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5 posted 12-14-2004 11:49 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

This is very original,
which, as you well know,
is hard to do.
You've got an interesting way of speaking
and I like it.
Very cool.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

scorpio
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right...there


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You do have a creative way with words.  Enjoyed.

believe in what your heart feels...

Huan Yi
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Thanks everyone.

The title is, oddly, a Japanese euphemism
for a woman considered past her marriageable prime,
( referring to bake goods cheaply on sale after
the holidays), similar to the Canadian “autumn leaves”,
as well as alluding to the event, a company Christmas party,
that was the basis.

John

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on the threshold of a dream


8 posted 12-15-2004 02:50 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I can't believe I almost missed this one... it would definitely have been my loss... it's fantastic!!
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


9 posted 12-15-2004 02:53 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Well done...very much enjoyed the read!

     Season's Greetings!

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10 posted 12-15-2004 02:57 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I guess they spell wallflower all kinds of ways, and I know that each hurts more than the last.  I liked this a lot.
miscellanea
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OH


11 posted 12-15-2004 04:34 PM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

Me, too!  I, especially, like the title you chose.
       miscellanea
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


12 posted 12-15-2004 05:50 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

for a woman considered past her marriageable prime,

hmmmm....and just when is that?

M
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displaced


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very touching piece
Drauntz
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14 posted 04-28-2007 08:32 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

unfinished life. every where.why points to women  the greatest group?????

Christmas cake is a kind of cake made with Brandy then covered with  thick icing. the longer, the better. do not joke at it. it is not a cheap one. it is a goooooooood and any body sees it, want a piece.
 
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