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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-12-12 09:41 PM


In Progress


Thoughts are intertwined
within the shadows of a smile.
"A Work in Progress" say I,
titled just for you.

They come and go,
some dark, some light,
all aware of tomorrow
and the unconditional.

Those final acts of life,
arrest me in sorrow
pitting the passion against such,
a change of seasons there
to confuse.

But I feel your whispers
stranding me in temptation,
your warmth upon my heart
sometimes playing hide and seek
but always winning out.

I am challenged by the new,
the old beginning to shed its hold,
finally.

You are and I am...
Between the lines.

M


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
1 posted 2004-12-12 09:48 PM


yea, i could feel the grey areas, that feeling of hesitation , reservation and just treading lightly.......its a dance, isn't it?
always a dance
liked this much

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2004-12-13 01:19 AM


"A work in progress" how aptly put.

Good to read that acceptance is in your mind.

Closure is a wonderful thing when it finally comes along and I wish you the best with it all. Although I hope it never diminishes your wonderful muse.


Eric

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-12-13 07:52 AM


But I feel your whispers
stranding me in temptation,
your warmth upon my heart
sometimes playing hide and seek
but always winning out.

powerful writing girl!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
4 posted 2004-12-13 11:56 AM


"They come and go,
some dark, some light,
all aware of tomorrow
and the unconditional"

So very true.  

  you did good!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-12-13 12:04 PM


Understanding this all too well...
Excellent write M.
Hugs~Nancy

     Season's Greetings!

DavePage
Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

6 posted 2004-12-13 05:13 PM


A lovely piece of mystery here.

Real look at life.

Excellent meanings hidden behind the words.

Dave

A knowledge of inner strength and when you have that strength then the whispers of those who lack that strength.

I am challenged by the new,
the old beginning to shed its hold,
finally.

You are and I am...
Between the lines.

M

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-12-18 09:47 AM


so good at the endings, we are
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