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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-12-11 05:16 AM


There's a child I didn't know
orphaned
in my yesterday
of this now
discovery
and I'm supposed to care today
because it is the headline news
topic
of the day, my friend.

Tell me does it make it less
if I post an announcement?
Tell me does it make it more
that I wrote this poem for

Dylan

he's a poet too.
(Did I write this just for you?)
Scratch your head and guess

regret

letting loose the vein

the taste

of the waste

of time test true

should I count replies and cry
stating that his mother died
three years after Daddy did
counting oxycontin death

(please, sir, can I have some more?)

orphan, orphan

dignity

Did you count the drops of bleed
sprayed across the bathroom floor
and splayed like art
upon the walls
Did you wonder what that was
as you played in bubbles
bathed
in pretense normality?

oh dear god

Don't talk to me.

There's a child I do not know.

He was orphaned yesterday.

and I dare to choose to think
that perhaps a slave was freed
from the claw of destiny

gripping too mechanically

for a quarter prize.


He is nine years old
and I
didn't know his name
until
I heard that
she died today
as I
cut the flour,
sugar trees -
sprinkled with
some sparks of green--

and Dylan is his legacy

"Lord, she gave him name."
I said,
wondering what to do
I bled

cookie cutter tears.



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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2004-12-11 05:27 AM


this touched Karen..well written feelings


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GG
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passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-12-11 07:13 AM


oh gawd
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4 posted 2004-12-11 10:26 AM


wow.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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5 posted 2004-12-11 10:34 AM


Oh my .. oh my.

Hugs dear lady.  Chrislane

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2004-12-11 10:45 AM


serenity,
It's all in a lifetime and there is more to come.

icebox
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7 posted 2004-12-11 10:49 AM


"wondering what to do
I bled"

...and wrote.

...and shared.

Thank you.

ethome
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8 posted 2004-12-11 11:36 AM


Wow! Very touching words with excellent images to back them up.

Eric

IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

RSWells
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9 posted 2004-12-11 12:27 PM


A stunning, grievous and wrenching write.
wranx
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10 posted 2004-12-11 12:57 PM


This is Art, Karen

As for the subject...I can only echo what's already been said

Hugs, m'witch

(And have yourself a merry little Candlemass)

Enchantress
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11 posted 2004-12-11 01:31 PM


""Lord, she gave him name."
I said,
wondering what to do
I bled

cookie cutter tears."


Ah gawd Ser...this is heart-wrenching.
Hugs to you sweet lady~

     Season's Greetings!

Ericc
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12 posted 2004-12-11 03:20 PM


Very powerful.

Eric

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2004-12-11 05:26 PM


thank you

I wish I could say I made this one up. But sadly for the third time in five years, a child in my "social circle" has been orphaned due to drug overdoses.

It kind of puts the lesser things in life in perspective.

My friend's sister is going to take care of him. She's a good girl and she'll be a good mother to him. *shaking my head* If not better.

My friend died a mess and it scared the crap out of me to think such a thought.

And I don't know why I'm telling ya'll all of this, but I just wanted to say, "let's be kind to one another".

Life is a bitch. No need to be one. And even if I can live that creed for only one day, I intend to try.

Hugs to you all. And if you are the praying sort, say a prayer for little Dylan.


pandonov
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14 posted 2004-12-13 10:32 AM


sad, but incredible poem
Janet Marie
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15 posted 2004-12-13 11:32 AM


"cookie cutter tears"


...



Gentle Spirit
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16 posted 2004-12-13 11:32 AM


Indeed Dylan is in my thoughts K, as are you.  Gut wrenching is correct...
heart hugs.

Susan Caldwell
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17 posted 2004-12-13 11:39 AM


and maybe your telling of his story got through to someone, somewhere..

to you Karen, because I know those tears are oh so real.

love ya lady.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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18 posted 2004-12-13 11:39 AM


I rarely see our Moth lost for words...
and I am sorry for the reality of the write...

as I know a Dylan,
I shall say an extra prayer
for his "twin"...

Thank you, serenity.

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19 posted 2004-12-13 03:59 PM


hugs my friend...

ya know you write it so well.. you always touch me.


serenity blaze
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20 posted 2004-12-13 05:24 PM


thanks for the understanding

(I didn't intend to prostitute our friendship or her memory for the sake of replies.)

I had known her for over thirty years, but in the last five, I confess I had sort of distanced myself from that social circle.

So the news wasn't shocking to me, but then again, it was. I don't believe that any of the friends I have lost to drugs intended to die.

Now that is something that has been on my mind, and if it makes someone else think about the dangers and complicities of an accidental overdose, then I don't particularly mind sharing her story or mine.

Peace to you all, and happy holidays.

I'm off to study algebra. (yeah, I know, I told my son I failed it myself, but he still thinks I can help. *chuckle* Gotta love his faith in me tho.)




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