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Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
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Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-12-06 09:00 PM


Monotonous ramblings
of an unenthusiastic instructor
fall upon the groans
of unmotivated pupils.
black boards
and chalk fade from sight
as ivory sands
and aqua waves
break across vision.
tropical tastes
set across parched tongues
serenity sets over every muscle.
flashes of storm struck lightning
split second serenity sacrifice.
sands become charred earth
life giving water
becomes flowing fire.
mangled horns
upon a head
of pure evil
body of a lizard
approaches with footsteps of darkness
grappling motionless throats
hissing through unholy tongues
"I am Chizrik Char.
Remember this well."
claws release
with insrumountable force
as ground meets body
and dust settles
over Shadrach's eyes.

(this is the fourth scene in my poem/movie. i hope you all enjoy)

nice use of muffin

aim= FlyingScrew. message me if you feel.

© Copyright 2004 John Lervezuk - All Rights Reserved
Dautz Write
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since 2004-11-16
Posts 96

1 posted 2004-12-06 10:13 PM


It was interesting to see how quickly you changed the tone and intensity in this.  Enjoyed!
             dautz

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
Posts 252
Far from where I am going
2 posted 2004-12-06 10:45 PM


thank you for dropping in.

nice use of muffin

aim= FlyingScrew. message me if you feel.

Dautz Write
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since 2004-11-16
Posts 96

3 posted 2004-12-06 10:49 PM


My pleasure.
   dautz

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