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Tux shirts and Bluebottle flies
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Tux shirts and Bluebottle flies |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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In some ways His life was little different He lived then, as now In a heatless space overlooking a river Though, that river, the earlier one Was asphalt and dry And defined by cement banks It was a summer in the early eighties His hair was gray even then, and long He dressed in sandals and faded jeans And tuxedo shirts, the flat-fronted ones Bought used, from a haberdasher Sleeves rolled up to the elbows in the day Down at night, flapping open at the wrists He knew it to be an affectation He merely enjoyed the incongruity But the whiskey Like the summer, was candid And the summer Like the women, hot to the touch Those summers embedded long ago In this nameless age and filled With women and books that he would Only begin to understand much later Were, but a crowded hour And a time without consequence Ignorant or uncaring That one day he may find himself Drooling into his soup Or that Bluebottle Flies In another summer on another river Might congregate one evening At the pools of his eyes, to drink |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
But the whiskey Like the summer, was candid And the summer Like the women, hot to the touch Those summers embedded long ago In this nameless age and filled With women and books that he would Only begin to understand much later my friend... I'm always impressed... and I always enjoy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Been there, done that. Enjoyed the write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent excellent write m'friend! Very very much enjoyed! Hugs~ ~ Let peace begin with me... ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I knew this would end with the subject of death, as bluebottle flies were the ultimate giveaway... but getting there was well worth the trip through your eyes. Thank you, Wranx! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
http://www.poemhunter.com/p/m/poem.asp?poet=10006&poem=96855 |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The bluebottle flies or the worms. I rather fancy exerting my last effort climbing up in a tree like a Lakota and letting the crows have at it. Too far away for a Tibetan Sky-Burial...pity. I liked this. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx "Were, but a crowded hour" You are so unique and so....eek, what's the word? Let me just say that the time it took to read this, not a crowded hour, but, some mavrick minutes, you took me to someone I think I have known by a cement river a time ago. Thank you! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
He knew it to be an affectation He merely enjoyed the incongruity In a different place with different choice of attire... I knew him, too... And I wonder if they chose their end knowingly just as they chose their living... with a slight tip of the hat. *S* Excellent, thoughtful write! *S* |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
And a time without consequence Ignorant or uncaring That one day he may find himself Drooling into his soup Or that Bluebottle Flies In another summer on another river Might congregate one evening At the pools of his eyes, to drink oh sh-- damn wranx...brutal in is come full circle honesty....damn. **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: Oh but the journey to get to that place wearing those tux shirts, would be one I bet you would not change? This Yeti, is why you are SO special to me! Very few real people in this world, and fewer real people that are grounded in their own skin of integrity and truth - you are! Lub ya! (now that will sure start rumors won't it.)   Let there be peace on earth ~ and let it begin with me |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed? you read my mind, replacing your very thoughts with my own feelings of myself. I doubt anyone has lived as you, and you have much living TO do. The ending made me sad because I always picture you smiling. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn good pensive pentioner a chuck n'  |
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