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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-02-05 05:47 AM


                    
                         In the end—
                    a fat old woman
                         feeding her dog

© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-02-05 06:21 AM


smile

I'm not sure if I want you to reincarnate as an old fat woman or a dog--

and either would be redundant.

(That was my mean response and somehow I think you can take it.)

But I did enjoy this, and woof and moan, either way, it hit too close to home.

(can I smile now?)

sheesh.

Tell me you have a sense of humor...???


Huan Yi
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2 posted 2005-02-05 06:28 AM



serenity blaze

Oh yes, this is intended very much
to be open to interpretation as the reader sees fit.

Glad you read it.

Thank you.

John


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3 posted 2005-02-05 06:32 AM


Glad you wrote it.

Thank you.

Karen



(it may not have showed but I really liked this)

GG
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4 posted 2005-02-05 06:35 AM


lol @ Ser

Yep, I think we all know that the dog is a female... It's just a given.


Thanks for this, John. I needed a funny image as I sit here wide awake in the middle of the night.  

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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5 posted 2005-02-05 07:22 PM


Awesome write!

~Alli~

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Margherita
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6 posted 2005-02-05 08:41 PM


They might well enjoy each other's company.

And ... whether fat or slim, old or young .... the END is just a new BEGINNING.

Great image.
Love, Margherita

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7 posted 2005-02-05 09:07 PM


LOL, some unusual senryu imagery


Soulfisher
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8 posted 2005-02-05 09:22 PM


BUT WAS SHE GIVIN THE DOG A BONE
Drauntz
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9 posted 2007-04-23 06:42 PM


Little girl
in memory of her
beloved grandma.


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