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Tenderness

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Huan Yi
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0 posted 12-06-2004 01:51 AM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Huan Yi


Finally,
I let you go
because you missed all the cues.

The big signs
in words that said:
say something sensitive
and own him.

Because, instead,
with deep,
bright,
blank looks
you awaited my bid,
my proposition.
What and where
I would buy
to buy you
in your last years
of pretty.

Because, if I met the price
and by mistake you came to "love" me,
I saw myself,
my life as work,
time
blocks of stone
moved around
making a way to death;

my only happiness
being too busy to see
    
all the men when you were young
come
dripping from your womb
through your now
understood
vacant eyes
                            
to laugh
in my face.  
© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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since 10-29-2000
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Between the Lines


1 posted 12-06-2004 05:31 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

hmmmmm...

The big signs
in words that said:
say something sensitive
and own him.


reverse that please~~~

~softly smiling quiet thoughts~
M
Paula Finn
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since 06-17-2000
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2 posted 12-07-2004 12:26 PM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

I think I understand what you are saying...sometimes all it takes is the right way of saying something. What are words but gifts we give to the person who touches our hearts?
LeeJ
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since 06-19-2003
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SE PA


3 posted 12-07-2004 12:33 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

this one speaks volumns, feelings which I've felt, but have tried to keep in mind, as well, people cannot always read minds, and fear being bold, for perhaps fear of loosing even a friendship.  I know, been there, done that...to many times, I've taken that step, only to have rejection look directly into my heart....and so...

Good good honest write.
Enjoyed
Ericc
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4 posted 12-07-2004 04:30 PM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

Powerfuly expressed.

Eric
Huan Yi
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5 posted 12-07-2004 07:23 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Huan Yi

Thanks everyone.

This thing is in company
with a poem with the same title
by David Ignatow.

John

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn


6 posted 12-07-2004 10:01 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Very good work!

Very good indeed.
Drauntz
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7 posted 05-15-2007 09:00 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

whose is better?
 
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